Dark Days Pt2

[Tash8]

fuck the world, but i don't feel that badly though
these dark days happen, to show we fragile, so
the next time you yell, you scream or fall
just watch out behind you, cause I'm feeling y'all
it's not my bad day but it's all of ours
it's not one house it's a boulevard
i get angst once and I'm anguished again
to understand us, you gotta feel our pain
gotta feel every moment and gotta feel every strain
gotta feel the nights breeze, gotta feel days rain
gotta get me a conscience, to feel what I've done
I've hurt many but my remorse is none
now I'm backtracking steps, so i might rewind time
get back to the days where i didn't fear these crimes
where i felt so strong, that i didn't need pills
should a listened to the signs where it said weed kills

i redid my verse because the flow was too choppy, let me know what u think

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fuck the world, but i don't feel that badly though
these dark days happen, to show we fragile, so
the next time you yell, you scream or fall
just watch out behind you, cause I'm feeling y'all
it's not my bad day but it's all of ours
it's not one house it's a boulevard
i get angst once and I'm anguished again

thats flow still sounds choppy to me, but the rest of it flowed perfect imo

i also liked the rhyming man, it was smartly done concept and content was kool aswell, only problem was them first couple of bars sort that and you got a strong verse man

[Tash8]

yea i finsihed the verse and i learned that i was 2 bars short, so i added the first two, i probably should chnage them, and thanks

[SajN]

Nice one Tash.
The flow was good.
The rhymes were also good...and the concept

Take a look at mine aswell: "The Future".

[Ka0t1c]

you got something nice there, i see u've made some improvements