Syanied wrote:Hey here's the summary of a book/story I'm writing and I was wondering if it would capture anyones attention lol. Just read the summary and tell me what you think. If I get enough responses I might even start a thread with all the chapters
The Story:
Meet young David “Tenderheart” Jones, the kindest 16-year-old boy you would ever get to know. He has the perfect life: a girlfriend, a loving family, great friends, etc. But, little did he know, his life would soon change when he finds out his own girlfriend is pregnant with his child. Of course young David is happy at this news, but how would his and her parents feel when they find out this truth? It’s a struggle for him to try and keep this secret with his girlfriend, but when her parents find out, trouble occurs. David is torn between his want for his child and what he knows is right. Ultimately, he commits a great sin and begins to create a new door into his life filled with hatred, depression, and the ultimate want of blood thirst. Throughout his 3 year story, realize the evilness that is spread from the spore of a young boy’s first true sin as he throws his perfect life into the wind and starts anew. Yet when young David finally comes to face the truth of his actions, will it be too late for him to redeem himself? Or will he truly become an icon of evil and become…
David the Demented?
I originally planned this story to be like a journal. But as I look at it now, a journal type of story is gonna be difficult. but we'll see. In the mean time, I'll post the first entry I did just so people can see what this guy did and will get an idea of wat this story is about.
(Journal Entry)
May 22
Dude, I’m hella shaky right now. It’s not even funny. Tonight was just not cool, and I doubt what I did will ever leave my conscience. I might even go to jail if I ever get caught. I don’t want to go to jail. But I had to do it. Suzie’s parents were about to get an abortion on our baby and I wasn’t ready for that to happen. I WANT TO BE A DAD.
I don’t know though. I don’t think what I did was really necessary, but it had to be done, I think… I just waited till it was close to midnight, so then I know everyone was asleep in both my house and Suzie’s. Then I snuck out of my house and snuck into Suzie’s with a butcher knife. Oh my god. Then I walked to her parent’s bedroom and slit both of their throats. It wasn’t even hard to do. It was just one after the other and neither even knew it. They must have been in a deep sleep because they didn’t even take a deep gasp for breath when I slit the throat.
Then I don’t know what came over me. I must have had a mental side effect from whatever was in that drink Joe gave me. Anyways, after I had slit both of Suzie’s parents’ throats, I had the urge to drink the blood from the slits of their throats. Mmmmmm… boy was that shit GOOD! Her mother’s blood was the best. Actually now that I think about it that’s nasty. Something is wrong with me. But what?
And if Suzie finds out I killed her parents she’ll never talk to me again. She might even leave me. That’s why I chopped up her parents, put them in bags, and threw those bags into my closet when I got home. I think the only way to get rid of evidence is the cannibal way. I actually feel like making some meatloaf with a special ingredient in the afternoon. ^_^
Damn… the thought of Suzie leaving me has never been so great. I can’t let her leave me. Oh god. Then again, when she finds out her parents are gone, she’ll have nowhere to go. So she’ll have to live with us. Haha! I‘M A GENIUS! I got rid of one problem and even managed to become closer to my soon-to-be-baby’s mother, all at the same time. I feel proud of myself. Oh well. I think I’ll go bed now. Can’t wait to see what happens tomorrow.
