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Permit Our Sins

Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Mar 10th, '08, 01:54

audio for this track can be found here - http://www.forum.trshady.com/viewtopic.php?f=38&t=43705


These are the lyrics to a track that will be released shortly, its a fairly metiphorical peice but also speaking about my own feelings, but again the second verse is just provoking questions in a story telling manner (nearer the end of the verse) so its sorta an array of different skills getting shown in each verse, all of them having different points of view, but still staying on the same lines concept wise (the whole things is just about sins that can be done for the wrong reason or can fool people into thinking its the right thing to do)

im expecting alot of people not to grasp this and tell me im talking shit and that the verses dont make sense, if you think that then thats kool you just aint on the same wavelength and i could explain the verses so you do understand but i mean thats sorta taking away the whole meaning of a metaphor (and if all artists did that lupe fiasco would need to write about 30 novels just to explain one album lol)



Verse 1
if a sin to get to heaven does that make it all right
or if you got a golden pass would you take it tonight
mines would shake in flight and i'd crash back down
thats were they call limbo as a smash ma sound
ma own credability joost credited nil tae me
though i presented skill to be they all resented well a see
this isnt working, as the fire of hell is lurking
and my rhythms jurking, i cant place were i stand
we just below the heavens and above the hells
some blowing up in a blaze of a firerous spell
im going up in a race from the fire i tell
if you dont like it, fire me up aswell
im debating my blatan satan inside regreting
raking in the statement thats abatement with pride
making my ride, weather its grabriel or damion
i take in full for flame being a bribe when i decide

Chorus
we dont know were we are goin, we dont know were we've beenn
we just live our lives and permit our sins
we dont know if its wrong we dont know if its right
we just not giving a fuck coz we all headed to the big light

Verse 2
if you kill a murderer are you a killer yourself
or your wifes iller in health and she begs you to end it
do you watch her suffer even though you love her
no cure just a matter of time as you watch her decline
or say this guy ruined your life, took all your money and pride
and got your honey to ride with him and he lives off lies and sin
an original devil in duisguise pure evil in the rise
and your not the first hes done it to many before
and although plenty ignore it, you just cant
find out were he stays try phone but its ringing out for days
angers bringing out the ways to pay him back
your jack daniels cracks on the floor
you open the door there's words spoken no more
you firing off gore, kill him and that fucking whore
you look away, kill yourself, coz they had moved away

(Chorus)

Verse 3
let me switch what im saying as im slaying the day-in
waiting for eternal night we'll all be there all right
but my excistence is persistent in asking questions
as im masking lessons and these tasks is pressin
im guessin the testing that was set to live
came back negative, now my music never took off
and my life is ending thats the strife im sending
while the knife is pending do i ride to suicide
you decide coz few provide the fluid mind
that you could find you probly should re-wind
just to try grasp that, see musically
i refuse ta be, a blew fuse that see no spark
i try hard just to grind it out
but end up grinded about
so fuck the calm apraoch
imma stand enroach
and send most that trend boast
to a freind ghost at the end coast
is that my sin only the end knows

(Chorus)







i undertsand its a pretty long peice but feedback on the lyrics and stuff is apreaciated and if you got a peice posted that i aint given feed just say n ill look at it, ill give feed to the top couple of topics in a bit :y:
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Re: Permit Our Sins

Postby Robbie G » Mar 10th, '08, 02:36

Damn, that was pretty great man. :worship:

I'm not really qualified to give feedback but I enjoyed it. I liked how the first two verses were started off with a nice line that was a pretty deep questions because it gets you thinking and sets up the verse imo.

Can't wait to hear the track. :b:
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Re: Permit Our Sins

Postby Xray » Mar 10th, '08, 10:03

that was what you call a good concept/story told greatly :worship:

i reckon this is your best work man the verses were very interesting

and the chorus is very express full as well

can't wait for the audio :worship:

favorite part
im debating my blatan satan inside regreting
raking in the statement thats abatement with pride
making my ride, weather its grabriel or damion
i take in full for flame being a bribe when i decide

some devilish shit going on there :shifty: :devil: :b:
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Re: Permit Our Sins

Postby SajN » Mar 10th, '08, 15:57

Really good track :worship:
Good concept, and nicely used rhymes :y:
I think I got most of it, and it's all dope :worship:

Can't wait to listen to the track


And the part xray pointed out^^ is very good :y:
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Re: Permit Our Sins

Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Mar 11th, '08, 11:33

Shady Babie wrote:Damn, that was pretty great man. :worship:

I'm not really qualified to give feedback but I enjoyed it. I liked how the first two verses were started off with a nice line that was a pretty deep questions because it gets you thinking and sets up the verse imo.

Can't wait to hear the track. :b:


thanx man :worship: n hey, if someone with a completely nuetruel view on my work likes it then there qualified to give feedback lol :8)

Xray wrote:that was what you call a good concept/story told greatly :worship:

i reckon this is your best work man the verses were very interesting

and the chorus is very express full as well

can't wait for the audio :worship:

favorite part
im debating my blatan satan inside regreting
raking in the statement thats abatement with pride
making my ride, weather its grabriel or damion
i take in full for flame being a bribe when i decide

some devilish shit going on there :shifty: :devil: :b:


ha, thanx man :worship: audio soon :D

The Infection wrote:Really good track :worship:
Good concept, and nicely used rhymes :y:
I think I got most of it, and it's all dope :worship:

Can't wait to listen to the track


And the part xray pointed out^^ is very good :y:



thanx man, apreaciate it :worship:
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Re: Permit Our Sins

Postby Purple23Haze » Mar 12th, '08, 00:56

Honestly I didn't read all of it let me know when you got the audio version however I like the concept alot
N by the title it sounds like I'd agree and I agree people who are just going to say it makes no sense leave that shit for the birds yo it's unwanted info cause we already know aint nobody gonna understand everything all the time. keep it real peace! check out spittin fire still by purple 23 haze
This is edited now but I finished the last verse and it's lookin like some hot shit peace.
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Re: Permit Our Sins

Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Mar 12th, '08, 12:57

Purple23Haze wrote:Honestly I didn't read all of it let me know when you got the audio version however I like the concept alot
N by the title it sounds like I'd agree and I agree people who are just going to say it makes no sense leave that shit for the birds yo it's unwanted info cause we already know aint nobody gonna understand everything all the time. keep it real peace! check out spittin fire still by purple 23 haze
This is edited now but I finished the last verse and it's lookin like some hot shit peace.



thanx man, and the audio will be released before the end of the week (hopefully) its just getting mixed/mastered by the producer now :happy:

apreaciate the feedback :worship:
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Re: Permit Our Sins

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Re: Permit Our Sins

Postby Arabian Shady » Mar 14th, '08, 08:07

omfg :o
dude that was unbeliveably insane,awesome.
i listend to the track but coudnt understand it (accent!) so i had to keep the lyrics up infront of me,
flo was awesome,multies were efficient n the track actually made sense.
sick shit :worship:
peace :b:

P.S.:since ur are replyin can u feed mine,its a tad bit old but i reali wanted a teview from you,its called "UNTITLED"
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Re: Permit Our Sins

Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Mar 14th, '08, 18:08

Arabian Shady wrote:omfg :o
dude that was unbeliveably insane,awesome.
i listend to the track but coudnt understand it (accent!) so i had to keep the lyrics up infront of me,
flo was awesome,multies were efficient n the track actually made sense.
sick shit :worship:
peace :b:

P.S.:since ur are replyin can u feed mine,its a tad bit old but i reali wanted a teview from you,its called "UNTITLED"



thanx man, glad you liked it and apreciate the feed :worship: im working on speaking clearer with the accent so hopefulyl next time you wont have any trouble listening to it :sweating:

and i will check it out and give a review before the weekend is finish, i would now but im getting ready to go out, but ill make sure i check it tomorrow once i got rid of my hangover lol
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