My Whole Verse In Northern Lights

[SajN]

This is the whole verse. I posted a while ago a bit of it. Now this is finished


"From the day I discovered this beautiful light
I felt I had the power and the spiritual inside
A lyrical vibe deciding to give it a try
A tribe of mics, I got the eager to write
And price the musics masterpiece,
The rap, hip-hop, the real arts are these
For them the place in my heart increased
And it started to beat cuz of rap, just for that,
It was my combustion, trust me,
I was nuthin’ without it
Just an ass and a rotten coward
but this rap power made me escape it
so my life wouldn’t be wasted, it saved me
that’s why me and Jay-19 retaliates it,
by doin’ the same and praise it,
Raise it to the top within the northern lights
It’s Hip-Hop, so our countries will be modernized,
Ï'm talking about Sweden and Norway right.
I fight for us, but not for cash
And even if I turn to trash,
I will never turn into another Gayne fag
and ruin the main rap, and turn it into just plain crap.
So Jay-19 and me are fighting to keep it real,
that created and still is creating the rap. It gave us strength.
Now we're paying it back, with the message we just sent."


It's from the collab with KillahGoat.

Any honest feed is appreciated

[Steve Spag]

The begiging of it started off pretty sick, but you started to slip off towards the middle and end in my opinion. You've done better before though, so keep it up man.

From the day I discovered this beautiful light
I felt I had the power and the spiritual inside
A lyrical vibe deciding to give it a try
A tribe of mics, I got the eager to write
And price the musics masterpiece,
The rap, hip-hop, the real arts are these
For them the place in my heart increased

Those are the best bars out of it in my opinion. I like the flow for it .

[SajN]

Thanks for the feed man
I admit I slipped off afterwards, but you think it's good enough to be recorded?
It's been a while I had this finished, so now I know this by heart and I've started to record some snippets to check out..

[Rain Matrix]

well I agree that tha beginning was good... good enough to be recorded
but I also agree that u slipped... and unless u make some edits I wouldn't record it just yet

but it has that potential so take this as constructive criticism

[SajN]

Thanks for honest feed man
I'll see if I can change it, if not; then I will record this version

[Xray]

nice piece like i said before this part is just genious

A tribe of mics, I got the eager to write

[SajN]

nice piece like i said before this part is just genious

A tribe of mics, I got the eager to write

yeah yeah yeah... I know it's a dope part
Thanks man

[sinemm]

music is passion and thats why i respect what you do..the meaning of it is the most important part of it in my eyes more than the technical stuff
so keep it up

[SajN]

Thanks

It's my passion too , the content got a lot to say for me too

Thanks again


More feeds ?

[Tornado]

This is the whole verse. I posted a while ago a bit of it. Now this is finished


"From the day I discovered this beautiful light
I felt I had the power and the spiritual inside
A lyrical vibe deciding to give it a try
A tribe of mics, I got the eager to write
And price the musics masterpiece,
The rap, hip-hop, the real arts are these
For them the place in my heart increased
And it started to beat cuz of rap, just for that,
It was my combustion, trust me,
I was nuthin’ without it
Just an ass and a rotten coward
but this rap power made me escape it
so my life wouldn’t be wasted, it saved me
that’s why me and Jay-19 retaliates it,
by doin’ the same and praise it,
Raise it to the top within the northern lights
It’s Hip-Hop, so our countries will be modernized,
Ï'm talking about Sweden and Norway right.
I fight for us, but not for cash
And even if I turn to trash,
I will never turn into another Gayne fag
and ruin the main rap, and turn it into just plain crap.
So Jay-19 and me are fighting to keep it real,
that created and still is creating the rap. It gave us strength.
Now we're paying it back, with the message we just sent."


It's from the collab with KillahGoat.

Any honest feed is appreciated

like everyone else, i really like the first few bars, i think if you restructure the second part, could be some ill shit

[<VerbalTouch>]

The rap, hip-hop, the real arts are these
For them the place in my heart increased

hat was a pretty good line keep it up

[SajN]

Thanks man

[SajN]

Thanks for feed Maybe, appreciate it