Thoughts?

[Emadyville]

Just wondering what you thought of this, it's the beginning of a verse for my next album:

I sit with the pen after days, when the laughter fades,
Hear these rappers bullshit and just capture rage,
I work with words and manufacture ways,
Onto this rappers page, it’s like an actor’s stage,
My life story and each chapter made,
It’s a fracture, rewind and is faster played,
Through my mind of how disasters sprayed,
I broke the mold and now the plaster lays...

[JMG]

I was prepared to come in and diss u, but that was pretty good keep it up g

[Dark Blue]

oooo nice

[Rain Matrix]

nice multi's... u know I like that

[Emadyville]

Thanks for the feed people, I appreciate it.

[Solace]

hey man good job, whats your upcoming album called?

[Ka0t1c]

my thought...very skilled, write some more to read

[Robbie G]

I liked it man, good start.

[-[Zach]-]

damn man. excellent i thought. very lyrical and thought provoking. i really enjoyed it man. very good job

[Marsh devileny]

The flow's a little off though apart for that nice lyrics