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Short verse from a song i'm putting together

Postby Robbie G » Apr 30th, '08, 01:51

started out with shit, working my way up
didn't have a pot to piss in, I used a cup
Don't try to tell me you ain't changed by your envirement
coming up worried, wondering about your retirement
this is real, I'm not lying
I can't feel, too many people dying
around me and they can't eat
hungry and cold living on the street
how can we change this and help the penniless
we all try in life, but it's just a game of chess
Pawns and rooks, cops and crooks
Some go for the books, some go for the looks
but it's all the same, hope and dreams
caught up in ourselves, we can't hear the screams
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Re: Short verse from a song i'm putting together

Postby Emadyville » Apr 30th, '08, 01:57

Not bad, environment/retirement rhyme was nice. This was your best lines tho

Pawns and rooks, cops and crooks
Some go for the books, some go for the looks
Menzo wrote:Its cuz you're dope and Daddy Dubs. No one fucks with that


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Re: Short verse from a song i'm putting together

Postby Robbie G » Apr 30th, '08, 02:07

Thanks, I wrote that pretty quick so i'll probably go back later and add in/remove some lines.
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Re: Short verse from a song i'm putting together

Postby -[Zach]- » May 1st, '08, 04:41

damn man. i thought that was pretty damn good. those last 4 lines were the best in my opinon. very real words. very good job :y:
"Did you ever stop to think/I'm old enough to go to war but I ain't old enough to drink" - 2Pac

"It's time to let the truth be told/There ain't no brighter day/'Cause when it all unfolds/A n**** gon' just pass away/These haters tryna stop my grind/But I bet them hoes can't block my shine/So tired of takin' losses not this time/I can't save the whole world I'm just tryna look out for mine" - Z-Ro

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Re: Short verse from a song i'm putting together

Postby Dark Blue » May 6th, '08, 14:21

put the song together haha
HATERS If you worked your dreams like you do your mouth - things would happen for you
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Re: Short verse from a song i'm putting together

Postby Rain Matrix » May 6th, '08, 15:52

I agree put this piece together
I wanna see tha final product if u will :y:
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