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**Dreams** New (Love-type song)

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**Dreams** New (Love-type song)

Postby Boston » May 7th, '08, 05:32

something new i wrote, pondering if i should record this one or not, but tell me what yall think of this one

this mornin' when i woke up i tried goin' back to sleep/
to love n' cherish every moment of you comin' back to me/
you know but actually/
the touch and feelings we experience in dreams are actually not happenin/
we use to be so close now we live so far/
you said i didnt try 'sleeping' but i did so hard/
if you only knew girl what you meant to me/
use to think no one else but us was meant to be/
now i sleep alright without your voice at night/
cuz i gave you two options, one choice was right/
but i cant be mad at the cheap decision you made/
cuz i found someone better who keeps me living today/
now you cant 'sleep' so you know how it feels/
n how i chose someone else so you know it kills/
you should of known things would of been this way/
now look what happened look where out friendship lays/
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Re: **Dreams** New (Love-type song)

Postby Solace » May 7th, '08, 22:21

well i really liked it. wouldnt mind if u recorded it, its nice. its sad and ironic. i like emotion in songs, so i enjoyed it.
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Re: **Dreams** New (Love-type song)

Postby -[Zach]- » May 9th, '08, 06:25

hell yea man. i like this one alot right here. alot of emotion and very real. i can relate to this. i say record it. very good job :y:
"Did you ever stop to think/I'm old enough to go to war but I ain't old enough to drink" - 2Pac

"It's time to let the truth be told/There ain't no brighter day/'Cause when it all unfolds/A n**** gon' just pass away/These haters tryna stop my grind/But I bet them hoes can't block my shine/So tired of takin' losses not this time/I can't save the whole world I'm just tryna look out for mine" - Z-Ro

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Re: **Dreams** New (Love-type song)

Postby Boston » May 9th, '08, 14:06

thanks for the feedback, ill post two songs im definitly recording later. i dont know when, but sometime before next saturday. link me to your songs and ill post feedback if you want, thank you.
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