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Lol no.

Postby Solace » May 3rd, '08, 20:11

Wat.
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Re: Diss freestyle

Postby Rain Matrix » May 3rd, '08, 22:12

pretty nice...
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Re: Diss freestyle

Postby -[Zach]- » May 4th, '08, 06:44

not bad man. a few very nice lines in there. good job keep it up :y:
"Did you ever stop to think/I'm old enough to go to war but I ain't old enough to drink" - 2Pac

"It's time to let the truth be told/There ain't no brighter day/'Cause when it all unfolds/A n**** gon' just pass away/These haters tryna stop my grind/But I bet them hoes can't block my shine/So tired of takin' losses not this time/I can't save the whole world I'm just tryna look out for mine" - Z-Ro

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Re: Diss freestyle

Postby Solace » May 6th, '08, 02:39

thanks Rain Matrix and -[Zach]-. I know its not the greatest but ccan someone else comment...
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Re: Diss freestyle

Postby Dark Blue » May 6th, '08, 14:19

humm yaa i gotta say this is cool i like when u said "she should really retire shes trying to be funny, but she aint no mike myers" i would give this 7 out of 10 (but thats just me)
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Re: Diss freestyle

Postby Solace » May 7th, '08, 02:36

thanks shadybaby101 appreciate it :)
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Re: Diss freestyle

Postby Darkblade44431 » May 15th, '08, 01:53

its alright. keep it up.
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Re: Diss freestyle

Postby Solace » May 17th, '08, 00:22

thanks for your input ;)
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Re: Diss freestyle

Postby Robbie G » May 17th, '08, 01:01

I thought you had some really nice lines:

im like eminem and shes papa doc
she should give up and take a walk


Maybe try some multies?

Props. :y:
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Re: Diss freestyle

Postby Solace » May 18th, '08, 00:40

thanks, i had another one which i tried doing multies on. it was like 5 lines. check it out, its gotton barely any views but its also called 'Diss Freestyle'. Its at the end of the first page ;)
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