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Freestyle *am i improving?*

Postby Solace » May 18th, '08, 21:12

i think im improving...

you try to rap but you sound like shit
sound like you rubbin your tiny dick
like drinking your own cum an swallowing it
and now look at the crowd they clappin they hands
and now look at you pretending they ur fans
you look like a mohterfucking fool
and you fall like an overused tool
most of your shit you copyed and pasted
you cant rhyme, really just face it
in real life your just a choke artist
fucking dumbass now whos the smartest?
you really try rapping against me
after that ill fuck you up like ice t
fucking pussy...

EDIT: heres another version of it (i fixed it up :))

You try to rap but you sound like shit,
you sound like your rubbin' ya tiny dick,
like drinking your own cum an swallowing it,
please dont get mad at me and break into a fit,
and now look at the crowd; they're clappin their hands,
and now look at you pretending they're your fans,
you look like a motherfucking fool,
and you fall down like an overused tool,
most of your shit you really copied and pasted ,
you cant rhyme....just face it,
in real life your just a choke artist,
fucking dumbass now whos the smartest?,
if you even try to rap against me,
ill fuck you up like eminem did mariah carey.


if you liked any lines could you tell me
Last edited by Solace on May 19th, '08, 18:12, edited 2 times in total.
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Re: Freestyle *am i improving?*

Postby Solace » May 18th, '08, 21:43

why isnt it freestyle? arent freestlyes a rhyme u make on the spot? and also this is supposed to go to this http://youtube.com/watch?v=OCARTCTKpm4 Some words i have to stretch to make it work.

and yea i guess that ice t thing doesnt make sense. i should said "fuck you up like eminem to mariah carey". wait, does that make sense?
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Re: Freestyle *am i improving?*

Postby Solace » May 18th, '08, 21:55

ahhh i see

so is there any term of freestyling and typing it?

ps. thanks for help
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Re: Freestyle *am i improving?*

Postby Tash8 » May 18th, '08, 21:58

key style?
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Re: Freestyle *am i improving?*

Postby Solace » May 18th, '08, 22:00

Oooh :o
Wow, shoulda thought about that before :whistle:
ok lol chet.
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Re: Freestyle *am i improving?*

Postby Emadyville » May 18th, '08, 23:48

I consider freestyling, or as you put it, keystyling, to be an actual freestyle, but yeah it was alright, keep working, as long as you think ur improving you prolly are
Menzo wrote:Its cuz you're dope and Daddy Dubs. No one fucks with that


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Re: Freestyle *am i improving?*

Postby Solace » May 19th, '08, 17:54

Okay, thanks Emadyville for your input :happy:
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Re: Freestyle *am i improving?*

Postby <VerbalTouch> » May 19th, '08, 20:17

was this a diss to kblock? :laughing:
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Re: Freestyle *am i improving?*

Postby Solace » May 19th, '08, 21:29

i have no idea what k-block is :confusion:
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