**Happy Anniversary** Please Feed

[Boston]

i wrote this to my girl for our anniversary, i just took out some of her name just incase of the creeps onlineee, tell me what yall think, please feed *(When Im Gone Instrumental)*
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have you ever loved someone so much you'd give an arm for/
be her protection, soldier, knight and suit of armor/
always looking out for her so if anyone harms her/
ill find, come back and kill that person, call it karma/
shes beautiful, amazing, PERFECT, ya the whole girl/
Leanne Mary ******, my everything, my whole world/
who woulda guessed we'd be like this, the night we first met/
shes my little angel, im so blessed to meet sucha person/
we have so many good memories, from Nicoles' to the sleep overs/
to sneaking down at 4 A.M. n' losing my keys sober/
your the oxygen to my body, the air that i breathe/
your the love of my life, the Leanne Mary to me/
i met everything i said, from this song to that letter/
when were together; words cant describe, no feeling is better/
i can't wait for our future, get married n start off a family/
and looking back on this date, i love you, happy anniversary/

[Arabian Shady]

I thought that was pretty deep man,it was very well written,flow was constant

peace

[Emadyville]

Good shit, it helped you said to the When I'm Gone beat cause I had that in my head, made it really dope. And yeah it was deep, good shit.

[-[Zach]-]

i really like that man. for real. it was deep and written in an honest way. true emotion and love there. i really enjoyed it. the flow was dead on too. congratulations on the anniversary man. i hope you and your girl are together forever. keep it up

[Boston]

thanks all

upp

[Kez]

Nice job ripping off "When I'm Gone".

Agreed.

And i don't care if you did write it to the When I'm Gone instrumental; that's bad enough, but you should at least try to innovate and make it your own, not just copy it.

[Boston]

i never usually complain, but for the last 2 comments
whats the big fucking deal for one, i didnt "rip" or copy shit
thats bad enough for writing it to that instrumental? what are you stupid or something
everyone rights to some instrumental, commercial or not, that was by far the stupidest comment
and for the other dude, how is that ripping it off? please explain how, i dont think our topics were anyways related, but please enlighten me, and if your going to say something about me taking the first line thats pathetic, i just started off the way he did

[Boston]

okay im going to leave my above post, but i apologize for responding like that, i wasn't in a good mood, but can you please explain, thank you.

[Jay-19]

Wow man! I really, really liked this! It had that true feeling over it, know what I mean? And it was written very deep. Really good writing man!

[Kez]

i never usually complain, but for the last 2 comments
whats the big fucking deal for one, i didnt "rip" or copy shit
thats bad enough for writing it to that instrumental? what are you stupid or something
everyone rights to some instrumental, commercial or not, that was by far the stupidest comment

Alright.

have you ever loved someone so much you'd give an arm for/
be her protection, soldier, knight and suit of armor/
always looking out for her so if anyone harms her/
ill find, come back and kill that person, call it karma/

Uses the same rhymes as Eminem, just changes their position.
Flow is identical pretty much.

your the oxygen to my body, the air that i breathe/
your the love of my life, the Leanne Mary to me/

And that's clearly bitten from Crazy in Love, unless you claim to be such a great lyricist you use the same type of shit as Eminem.

As for the writing to the beat thing, writing to a non-commercial (ie original) beat is fine. But writing to official commercial beats is bad because one, you can't live up to the original unless you're great, and two, you should be focusing on your own music rather than doing covers, because otherwise you'll be grouped into a category of people who rip off Eminem.

[Boston]

^^ lol
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but i can understand where your coming from kez, and at least thanks for being honest
i understand where your coming from though on using commercial beats, but the problem is, (well to me anyways) original beats get played out to fast, and for the crazy in love part, i wasnt even thinking of that song when i wrote this haha, but yeah, i see your similarities.

[Boston]

and thank you killagoat

[Cwayon_Murder]

It's kinda weird that you took a song about Em's daughter and turned it into a love song for your girl

[Boston]

haha i guess if you think about it like that