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[Darkblade44431]

I actually like this song so far. i'm actually thinkin about putting this on my mixtape. Tell me if you think its good, i like it. Only one verse so far, but i got a hook too.
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song is called "I can't rap"
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[Hook X 2] I cant rhyme, i cant stay on track
i cant keep the beat, i cant make a rap,
i cant see...that my rap is wack,
till its already written on the pad.
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Verse one:
I cant rhyme, and if i had a dime, a mugger would threaten my life, and tell me it isnt mine. And this is only further angering me, this just makes it more impossible to stay with the beat, and i gotta burn the fossil fuels to keep in the heat. every little distraction is so annoying to me. Every little mishap or thing thats happened to me, just comes back to bite my ass, which makes me a disasturous seed. I think i'm gonna hang myself, and find out if i'll go to hell, what would i even say to myself?, i might as well have been livin in jail. My thoughts are trapped, and right when i think that i can rap, its just my luck that i would end up dyin of a heart attack. So i bet you're wonderin which one, did i hang myself to be released from jail?, did i die of a heat attack from gettin pissed that i still dont have a deal?, did i use a gun?, or did i commit every suicide thats under the sun? My eyes are wide open, if i could get em off, i'd be flickin flies, maybe one day someone will recognize this rap, and say, I'm golden.

[Hook X 2]

I cant seem to get a thought outta my head, i cant feel the beat when my lyrics come off of the lead, i cant keep in good spirits when i'm rappin for the dead, cuz i'm writin this for me, and no one else but these, sped up thoughts inside of my head. Maybe they'll just leave and kindly put me to rest. But no, i'm not dead, i'm only dead to me, you wanna check to see?, it wouldnt even matter if you thought that you knew me, i lost my memory, my mind does not memorize, no matter how long we knew each other, you're no longer my brother, so get out the candle lights, and pray that i come back to life. as i was sayin, come up and poke me just to see that i'm real, i may be alive, but my heart is cold steel. i still wouldnt move if i got the deal, but when i'm gone, me and all the other rappers, together in speed, we'll spit a rhyme at the time when i'm forever in sleep.

[Hook X 2]

As i'm just about to enter in the devils department, i can start to feel my heart, its beginning to start again, there's a party at my house and people are rockin, Shit!, why cant i stay on topic, God Damnit stop it!, i'm about to shoot my fuckin courage out, if i cant get these words out, maybe when i'm done with this song i'll learn how. it doesnt matter if my body's on the couch, i need to get my mind out. Listen while i'm alive now, you may get a prized pal, but only when i'm dead, and no longer can i shout, i'll be out on the concrete if you need me, i'm blastin my eyes out, but before i did it i made sure that i left a mark, i pissed on little kids and shot em up at the park. and the reason that i'm doin this is cuz i know i'm rappin dumb, but if this was not sent back and not read as scum, it wouldnt matter cuz now i'll never make it platinum.

[Hook X 2]

[Emadyville]

not bad, interesting concept, keep it flowing

[Darkblade44431]

Thanks, lol, 1 comment, and 40 views. yeah, i got some good rhymes i'm thinkin of that i'll put into the second verse.

[Darkblade44431]

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