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Lord save me

Postby Ethos » Jun 9th, '08, 07:29

Eh... I'm starting to actually sit down and write out lyrics and stuff and trying to get a flow going. and i came up with this track the other day and just had to write it. but since im basically new at it i kinda need some help from the writers/rappers/pros if ya'll don't mind :sweating:

[Chorus]
Lord please save me from all these demons,
I feel them on my neck, they keep on breathing,
I sense them creeping in my dreams and nightmares,
I try to run away but I keep running scared,
Man i'm living in fear, Cuz I know what is near,
And peer to peer, I don't want to be here,
So Lord please save me, from these demons,
Before they take over, and I am beaten.

[Verse]

Give me a moment of clarity, to gather up prosperity,
My entire mind's been fucked up, due to some impediment,
Sentimentally, these obtrusions are wickedly sick,
I'm trying to capacitate my fortitude, and aggresiveness,
This shit specifically, has been making me notice
a change in attitude and passions, man these fucking facists,
Trying to change me up, Trying to fuck me up,
Trying to blame me for the body in the back of the truck,
Homie what's up with these fake ass wannabe psycho slash gangsters,
Trying to bang like cleopatra tried to do to caesar,
It's a living nightmare, breathing the same air,
as hannibal lector did when he ate that out that poor bitch,
And that poor bitch, deserved what she gets,
Like a 5 dollar hoe, emptying the contents of my dick,
These thoughts are so ill, man they are making me sick,
So Lord please save me from these demons, hurry up quick
R.I.P. Nate D-O-Double G

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Re: Lord save me

Postby Ethos » Jun 9th, '08, 08:19

Chet wrote:it's written very well, good to see someone not afraid of big words lol :worship: If your new at this, then you got a bright future....... as my ghost writer :shifty:


hahaha thanks. :happy: i didn't actually think it was that good. I thought the big words would kinda ruin it lol.
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Re: Lord save me

Postby Ethos » Jun 9th, '08, 08:27

Chet wrote:no they made it good, and some of your rhymes were pretty kool

only problem I see, is that some of it doesn't rhyme. But my mind is fucked from drinking off a hangover right now.


hahaha. yeah some of it wasn't meant to rhyme. it's kind of a poem in a way...
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Re: Lord save me

Postby Ethos » Jun 10th, '08, 07:13

Anyone else care to feed please? i wanna make sure it flows okayish before i do record. :sweating:
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