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Bored...Some Guy

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Bored...Some Guy

Postby Solace » Jun 11th, '08, 22:07

Yo...

I was just leaving my crappy junior high
when i pushed on the ground by this guy, he said
"You know what im thinking,
i need some money, so i can go out drinking"
I said "Fuck you, you fucking punk,
i aint giving money so you can go get drunk"
He punched me in the chest and i started to yell
i was like a weak snail coming out of the shell
i kicked him in the balls and ran away
he yelled at me calling me gay
but i ignored it cause hes a dick
messing with me, his head better be thick
now i dont get bullied that much
thank god for that little punk.

Its a freestyle about getting bullied to kicking ass :) Please comment.

Lengthined The Lines

I was just leaving my crappy junior high
when i pushed on the ground by this guy, he said
"Hey asshole, you know what im thinkin'
i need some money, so i can go out drinking"
I said "Kiss my ass, you bitch ass punk
i aint giving money so you can go get drunk"
He punched me in the chest and i started to yell
i was like a weak snail coming out of the shell
i kicked him in the balls and ran away
he cursed at me saying im just a gay
but i ignored it because hes just a dick
messing with me, his head better be thick
now i dont get bullied around that much
i should thank god for that little punk.
Last edited by Solace on Jun 14th, '08, 15:31, edited 1 time in total.
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Re: Bored...Some Guy

Postby Emadyville » Jun 11th, '08, 23:19

Not bad if you freestyled it, has potential, simple rhymes but hey it was a freestyle, if you lengthened a few bars it woulda flowed a little better :y:
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Re: Bored...Some Guy

Postby Solace » Jun 11th, '08, 23:49

Thanks Emadyville for replying, and for the positive feedback. And yup, pure freestyle. I said it walking home from school today. So lengthin the lines eh? Hmm like this?

I was just leaving my crappy junior high
when i pushed on the ground by this guy, he said
"Hey asshole, you know what im thinkin'
i need some money, so i can go out drinking"
I said "Kiss my ass, you bitch ass punk
i aint giving money so you can go get drunk"
He punched me in the chest and i started to yell
i was like a weak snail coming out of the shell
i kicked him in the balls and ran away
he cursed at me saying im just a gay
but i ignored it because hes just a dick
messing with me, his head better be thick
now i dont get bullied around that much
i should thank god for that little punk.
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