Will follow it?

[judah]

They're trying to keep you in jail
they make u feel a loser so u can fail
We say hail Mary, but life sometimes aint fair
so fight back atack dont look back avoid traps and breath fresh air
dont you ever understimate what u can do
u need to trust your skills and to the impossible
this is not MI's and u're not a secret agent
You're real u just need to avoid the wrong paths other people went
u aint no 50 cent... you
dont need to take 9 shots, survive for you to understand
that life is a game that we dont play
we're played like rats in a fucking maze
you dont make the rules they made the rules for ya
You can only win if u dont play by their rules brotha...
life is like a pattern that everybody follows
how can u win if in the same path ur ass goes?
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[Jay-19]

Pretty simple rhyme-scheme. The concept has been played out in my opinion, but one can still make a good verse out of it. And you did pretty well with a straight message. You should probably use a more advanced rhyme-scheme.