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Too nice

Postby Greeeeeeg69 » Jul 3rd, '08, 17:10

sitting in here losing my mind on this stupid shit
spitting right there using kind and cupid shit
gotta fix this up make it dark and scary
need to show how i feel not markin merry
show all these posers im not what they think
oh wow this composer isnt a cut away shrink
hes a serious mother fucker who feels in sync
with the way we feel and act he doesnt stink
Thats what i thought,
you see i know how it feels to be all down
rock bottom easy bitch im world renown
for the shittiest life in the 561
all beacuase of what these live chicks done
given me shit always hatin on players
wish fucking god would answer my prayers
and take me away to a far away place
i could vanish easily without a trace
maybe even as far as fucking space
Bitch you cant even keep up my pace.


worked kinda hard on this one
lemme know wat u think
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Re: Too nice

Postby The Toy Soldier » Jul 3rd, '08, 17:43

that ones pretty nice
*Would go with a "Rock Bottom" Instrumental by Eminem."
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Re: Too nice

Postby Kosovic » Jul 3rd, '08, 18:48

Do you know that by the time u will get better, no one will listen to rap anymore?
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Re: Too nice

Postby Emadyville » Jul 3rd, '08, 19:42

Rhymes were simple but it flowed well
Menzo wrote:Its cuz you're dope and Daddy Dubs. No one fucks with that


I love you Daren
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Re: Too nice

Postby BogerRoger » Jul 3rd, '08, 20:03

I like it too
you dont need 2 be hard-ass agressive 2 be an MC
Do ye :confusion:
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