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One Time On The Beach

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Re: One Time On The Beach

Postby Darkblade44431 » Jul 5th, '08, 16:14

Don't really like this one.
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Re: One Time On The Beach

Postby The Toy Soldier » Jul 5th, '08, 17:20

Chet wrote:nah...here a 9 lines I wrote today
I come at you with the lyrical heat that punch u in the chest
nah son a vest won't help, this track coming in and out ur brest
I'm coming out stinging like a wasp's nest, leaving rappers clinging
ringtones don't count, cause my phone ain't ringing, it's silent
tad bit violent, I'm also been know to provoke shit quick
nope no magic trick, don't need it, ur shit is just shtick
last cd went brick, so why think ur next is gonna sale big
ur 15 mins is up like spiderpig, so please just back away
claim to be underpayed, u got less of a chance of blowing up then a homemade grenade

Copywright Steve spag lol


Its Good But Id say more useful in a rap battle
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Re: One Time On The Beach

Postby Steve Spag » Jul 5th, '08, 23:35

it's not bad, couple good lines in there, but i've read better from you.

how come my copywright? lmao.
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