Ok I tried Harder this time

[The Toy Soldier]

Hmmm...u have a point there.

Yes I insist look at this way you pretend its ur topic and talk about how it is ear candy and then when someone talks nice about it its all for YOU?

[Kosovic]

I am trying....its not that easy.

[The Toy Soldier]

I am trying....its not that easy.

u can do it

[Kosovic]

But i dont care anyways. Even if its my post.

[Rain Matrix]

I like how feedback is more about being macho then helping a person elevate his game

dude... this was ok... if yur gonna do a track like this keep it as original as u can
I know that sounds like an oxymoron but I meant don't use tha same rhymes they did
and so on try to stay away from that... u did ok tho it was on and off

p.s. yur fucking friend needs more help then I can give him

[The Toy Soldier]

I like how feedback is more about being macho then helping a person elevate his game

dude... this was ok... if yur gonna do a track like this keep it as original as u can
I know that sounds like an oxymoron but I meant don't use tha same rhymes they did
and so on try to stay away from that... u did ok tho it was on and off

p.s. yur fucking friend needs more help then I can give him

I know I did just that I wanted to make the verse lines original (which I did for the most part since I had the lyrics of both versions on my screen) and editing the chorus and the intro to keep it in style so i wouldnt depart much from it you know? Originality+Non-originality=Remix its what Im trying to do and until I can come up with fresh stuff Im going to stick to remixing stuff it may be subpar but Ill know I can creat original shit once I hear the words to one of my remixes: "Its better than the original" no what im saying?
Thnx for feedback tho

@ Kosovic WAT?HOW?

[Kosovic]

wut u mean what?how?

It just happens.

[gladimnotsoluble]

I agree with Rain Matrix, I enjoyed how I could see the flow and stuff, but try to keep it a little more original, maybe mix in some new concepts. However, based on just the lyrics and how it flows too the song I definitely felt it. Keep it up

[The Toy Soldier]

wut u mean what?how?

It just happens.

what would it take to change other wise? ill do anything*

@gladimnotsoluble:Thanks But From what I read off the lyrics (Im talking only my verse here) contains a little leess than the stuff spit by fifty and Em but thnks for the feed if i get more feed like this or someone tells me too, Ill record it.

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[gladimnotsoluble]

You know what, reading it again i'm feeling it more. Keep it up, and make sure your rhymes are complex

I want to hear it. I want to hear your voice on something like this, see if you can

[The Toy Soldier]

You know what, reading it again i'm feeling it more. Keep it up, and make sure your rhymes are complex

I want to hear it. I want to hear your voice on something like this, see if you can

Thanks ill do that I have heard people tell me that they wonder what my voice is like so ill record it as soon as i can I have a problem when I sing verses though I think im dislexic like my sister cuz i tend to say words either twice if im going fast or ill fuk up BIG time so itll take awhile to attempt it