"The Dating Game"

[shadyallday]

heres a song i did called the dating game give me some feedback...


verse 1
Bachelorette number one, give us an introduction/ my name is Britney, and i just had liposuction/ i got a nose job and a breast reduction/ i can't have sex cause my body can't function/ Britney, which do u like better food or rapping?/ i like big mac's but i was part of a kidnapping/ Britney, if i asked u for head, would it happen?/ i don't swallow cum, but i'll bring a napkin/ thank u, do u have a hidden talent?/ i can open three condoms while i'm tossin a salad/ i just wanna say "I love u Weaz!"/ if u don't pick me, i'll beat your ass and steal your keys/

(Chorus)
there's three girls fightin for me/ i'm startin to feel like John F. Kennedy/ let's take a break, i need some hennesy/ during the next half hour can u find me a ho?/ theres no time, i have to get back to the show/

verse 2
we're back, bachelorette number two, its your turn/ i'm Christina and i'm a college intern/ my goal is to work in a giant law firm/ i also want to be president for one term/ i wanna give Bill Clinton head and watch him squirm/ anyway, i wanna be an attorney like my cousins daughter/ i wanted to be one ever since i saw Law & Order/ Christina, do u really think you'll be the first female president/ to be honest, that question is irrelevant/ i'll be too busy prosecuting a defendant/ sorry Christina, but you're runnin out of time/ why should i pick u for my future wife/ if you don't i'll give you 15 to life/ hold on Christina give me that knife!/

verse 3
Bachelorette number three, give me a warning/ i'm Mariah and i've been lookin at porn since two in the morning/ Mariah please tell me when u were born/ before i do, i want you to know i'm into amateur porn/ my moms mad at me caused i damaged her lawn/ she tells me i'm crazy and my job's no good/ i tell her she's lazy and her husband is so rude/ she thinks i take drugs cause i'm always looking for food/ i'm crude, and i got a bad attitude/ well Mariah thats pretty sweet/ remember if u pick me, i don't have much body heat/ we can make a sex tape like Pam and Tommy Lee/

verse 4
I think i'ma have to go with number three/ she's the only one that was nice to me/ the other two had a lot of issues/ god damn, they used up all of my tissues/ this was fun, we should do it again/ we can get three more ho's that will be my friends/ next time make sure the cameras facing me/ i have to go, i got two single girls chasin me!/

[3110]

nice

[Jay-19]

I enjoyed it. Even though it's pretty hard to read when you write it like that, you should write it in seperate lines, and not just one, long meaning.

Other than that, it's really funny, lot of humor and ok rhymes. The rhymes don't have to be advanced for this type of song. The concept was good too!

Good job!

[Arabian Shady]

I enjoyed it. Even though it's pretty hard to read when you write it like that, you should write it in seperate lines, and not just one, long meaning.

Other than that, it's really funny, lot of humor and ok rhymes. The rhymes don't have to be advanced for this type of song. The concept was good too!

Good job!

second that,try workin on structure,
peace

[Kosovic]

Welll.....normally i would start a rant about non genuine ideas for songs, but every topic was touched by every artist, so i rest my case. Thats it. I refrain from commenting.

[Robbie G]

I thought it was pretty good. Didn't care for two though.