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Postby <VerbalTouch> » Jul 25th, '08, 06:42

When I hear an instrumental it makes me mental
It makes me win my damn battles bitch read a bible
I'll trash his style this aint a freestyle he wants anal
I hear you lost your cable and now you're not cheerful (Awww)
God sent me to trash your label i suggest you be careful
funny thing is I'm a known devil and your lyrics are dull
We'll never be equal and yeah its true I am the evil
I'm a sexual idol and you wonder why I put you on idle
Its a shame you can't be civil now i gotta take this local
This is me just bein playful time I popped this pimple
Also i can get personal or I can get fucking restful
You don't know me I'm royal I'm here to crush your samples
Homie be senseful stop gettin so sexual stop bein single
before i do get ruthful and just be thankful tat i dont mingle
I will crush Your skull but that aint nice knowin your special
Ah fuck it I'll introduce you to my rifle its that damn simple
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Re: recent type up

Postby Darkblade44431 » Jul 25th, '08, 16:36

meh........i don't like this. Made no sense at all..... :n:
you rhymed "ull" and nothing else at all!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! you should be more creative...........make some multis maybe.......make some sense maybe.......actually rhyme sometimes maybe......hope i could help!!!!!!!
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Re: recent type up

Postby <VerbalTouch> » Jul 25th, '08, 17:00

whas it really worth typing like !!!!!!!!! and ....?
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Re: recent type up

Postby The Toy Soldier » Jul 25th, '08, 18:44

hes right though some of it don't make sense
Like Ive said before don't rhyme cuz you can, rhyme because ur able to make sense
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Re: recent type up

Postby Darkblade44431 » Jul 25th, '08, 19:02

ha ha, well said.
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Re: recent type up

Postby Rae » Jul 26th, '08, 04:21

When I hear an instrumental it makes me mental
It makes me win my damn battles bitch read a bible

When i hear instrumentals i feel like a mad scientist
My rhymes are so ill you need to see a psychiatrist

I'll trash his style this aint a freestyle he wants anal
I hear you lost your cable and now you're not cheerful (Awww)

My style is too versatile- for you to understand
You'll always bow down to me cuz i'm tha betta man

God sent me to trash your label i suggest you be careful
funny thing is I'm a known devil and your lyrics are dull
We'll never be equal and yeah its true I am the evil
I'm a sexual idol and you wonder why I put you on idle
Its a shame you can't be civil now i gotta take this local
This is me just bein playful time I popped this pimple
Also i can get personal or I can get fucking restful
You don't know me I'm royal I'm here to crush your samples
Homie be senseful stop gettin so sexual stop bein single
before i do get ruthful and just be thankful tat i dont mingle
I will crush Your skull but that aint nice knowin your special
Ah fuck it I'll introduce you to my rifle its that damn simple


Well i was trying to help ya out a lil bit ... idk im not a rapper ... but i can try to help you a lil bit sometime. i was gonna try to give you some help on the rest ... but this hot mexican dude just called me. hahaha

i'll come back tmw and finish if u want ;)
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Re: recent type up

Postby <VerbalTouch> » Jul 26th, '08, 04:56

Sweet :smoking:

can ya teach me how male and female parts work next :b:
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Re: recent type up

Postby Rae » Jul 26th, '08, 14:57

djblue wrote:Sweet :smoking:

can ya teach me how male and female parts work next :b:


hahaha yea ... we'll see :smoking:
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