New Love Song, Peep It. **

[Boston]

well, if yall remember i wrote to When Im Gone a while back, some liked it, a few said it was a bit like eminems version, so i took an original beat like some of yall suggested and wrote another love song

sorry i havent been posting much, ive been pretty busy writing for a certain project but i will leave as much feed as possible tomorrow

well anyways, here is the verse:
--

everything about her, from her brown hair and blue eyes/
a new addiction that brings me around here, a new high/
the clouds clear, a few signs, the crowd cheers, a new bride/
more than summer love; more than just lounge chairs at pool side/
how weird a new side, he was on some different shit/
not use to all the love n romance she was giving him/
it was like a gift to them, something to be living with/
own a house, getting married, settle in, have kids n shit/
still seems like a dream to me, something that just seems to be/
doing everything together, shes just like a team to me/
when we win we win together, when we lose we do the same/
relationships picture perfect; pull our image through the frame/
i want the whole world to see, that this woman's the girl for me/
n you cant buy her love, not with no pearls or green/
two teens crazy in love, in every way perfect/
you can say life is sweet, she makes every day worth it/

[The Toy Soldier]

well, if yall remember i wrote to When Im Gone a while back, some liked it, a few said it was a bit like eminems version, so i took an original beat like some of yall suggested and wrote another love song

sorry i havent been posting much, ive been pretty busy writing for a certain project but i will leave as much feed as possible tomorrow

well anyways, here is the verse:
--

everything about her, from her brown hair and blue eyes/
a new addiction that brings me around here, a new high/
the clouds clear, a few signs, the crowd cheers, a new bride/
more than summer love; more than just lounge chairs at pool side/
how weird a new side, he was on some different shit/
not use to all the love n romance she was giving him/
it was like a gift to them, something to be living with/
own a house, getting married, settle in, have kids n shit/
still seems like a dream to me, something that just seems to be/
doing everything together, shes just like a team to me/
when we win we win together, when we lose we do the same/
relationships picture perfect; pull our image through the frame/
i want the whole world to see, that this woman's the girl for me/
n you cant buy her love, not with no pearls or green/
two teens crazy in love, in every way perfect/
you can say life is sweet, she makes every day worth it/

its nice but what i always like to do is mention the name of the girl at least 1 time

like here is a line from a love song i made:
Ohh girl you are the most divine/
yes carmen your face be soo fine/

though speaking in ebonics isnt very romantic

[Xray]

fuck man, that was sick as fuck, not once you fell of. real good, and i reckon not mentioning the girls name is better, so others that hear the track relate if there in the same situation know what i mean and yo you don't want some crazy psycho finding out who your girlfriend is right? haha gotta keep it low

PS: what's her name?

[Nu Syd]

damn yeh nice read, i like it

[Arabian Shady]

dude the flow was absolutely spot on man,it was reali reali well written.
peace

[Boston]

thanks all
anyone else please?

[Wallace]

That was nice, the rhymes gives a cool rhythm when It's rapped.

[Boston]

thanks

[SkinNBlista]

Ah that was so sweet
great read Props