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Dancing with the Devil...

Postby The GameKeeper » Aug 8th, '08, 17:54

New shit... true shit... str8 fom the heart. Laying it down this weekend. 16 bars and 2 verses doesnt make for a very long song... maybe Ill add another verse... wanted to share it with yall...

D*Lucks The GameKeeper

DANCING WITH THE DEVIL

Ay yo I always seemed to settle for less
I woulda never ever thought that I could better myself
It’s like my soul was sold to the muthafuckin devil himself
Cuz I was on a dead end road, time to pick my feet
No looking back, still the danger awaits, see the shame in my face
is long gone, along with those invading my space
It look a long time changing my shape
And everything I loved wasn’t fuckin taken, shit I gave it away
I take it day by day while the games played
What I give is what I take, live and learn from my mistakes
Since returning from the gates I’m determined that Ill make
All my dreams come true and make a name with this rap shit
So here I go, where I go from here there is no tellin
I just know deep in my heart that dark hole that I fell in
Made me, the man that I am its all or nothing
I’m done with the fuckin runnin so watch me Im up and comin, check it…

CHORUS(2 X’s)
Alone in the dark with the devil Im dancing
The lady in the red dress is making advances
If this is romance, then I’m willing to chance it
Damn, I never knew you’d hold my soul for ransom



Am I insane, it’s Dr. Jeckyl, Mr. Hyde in my brain
Mano-a-mano, each side is the same
See I try to remain in the same frame of mind
And maintain I’m tryin, but it’s outta my range
I could never say goodbye to the game, its life or death
That’s why I went to school learned my rights and left :o
And now the fuckin voices inside my head
Are telling me to let it out or pay the price instead
I was, a broken man, whaling in my open hands
praying that I hope to change but staying in that hopeless pain
that life, was so insane now before my curtains close
Ill be searchin for my soul and Ill be workin overload
Cuz I don’t follow that road, that road is hollow and cold
That road will eat you up and swallow you whole
That evil road wanted me dead, right from the start
It put a gun to my head and a fuckin knife through my heart...heart…heart…

CHORUS(2 X’s)
Alone in the dark with the devil Im dancing
The lady in the red dress is making advances
If this is romance, then I’m willing to chance it
Damn, I never knew you’d hold my soul for ransom


CHORUS(2 X’s)
Alone in the dark with the devil Im dancing
The lady in the red dress is making advances
If this is romance, then I’m willing to chance it
Damn, I never knew you’d hold my soul for ransom
'D-Luckz'
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Re: Dancing with the Devil...

Postby Ak25 » Aug 8th, '08, 18:27

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Re: Dancing with the Devil...

Postby SkinNBlista » Aug 11th, '08, 00:58

yeah great chorus :y:
Whateva u wanna say, go ahead coz we dont play.
Every word taken to heart, supersensitive, arent u smart.
So how next r u gonna use it, laugh in my face is to abuse it.
Remember me G, coz i'm gonna live til I'm an OAP.
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Re: Dancing with the Devil...

Postby Rain Matrix » Aug 11th, '08, 16:33

verse 1 needs some work but has great potential
hook was ill no lie :y:
verse 2 was right on

overall u did well
remember it doesn't ever hurt taking some time on a piece
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Re: Dancing with the Devil...

Postby ilovemeghan » Aug 12th, '08, 18:56

omg thats fucking good! :y: :worship:
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