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Back 2 School

Postby The Toy Soldier » Aug 12th, '08, 02:05

Back 2 school
there is a new rule
new supplies there is to buy/
wander to the skies and be the guy/
that isnt the one to be the shy/
the one so cool the one so fly/
the one who was born ready to die/

im ready for whatever comes towards me/
to spit my tales like an emcee/
so you can see from mr c/
what you can be when you are me/
today i relearned my a fucking bc's/
was a bad day but still felicity/
long but still zoomed at high velocity/
looked at these girls and got me so horny/
talk about speed and wanting to be king/
the schools like an arena just a big ring/
take a punch and shit man it will sting/
for these lyrics are what i like to be singing/
these words im naturally spitting/

Back 2 school
there is a new rule
new supplies there is to buy/
wander to the skies and be the guy/
that isnt the one to be the shy/
the one so cool the one so fly/
the one who was born ready to die/

today i got to meet my new teachers/
some are kool some look like the grim reaper/
some got new rooms some got the cheaper/
some got febreze while others smell like refer/
some got variety while others have no differ/
some look relaxed others looked so stiffer/
some stay calm while others get the shivers/
some bite while the others have the lip quiver/
some are old need a kidney or a new liver/
some have a partime some ar partial strippers/
got they dicks in they puss like the big dipper/
some need to take a shower and xy theyre zipper/
and thats the life of an eight grader/
hope i do godd and maybe i might do better/

Back 2 school
there is a new rule
new supplies there is to buy/
wander to the skies and be the guy/
that isnt the one to be the shy/
the one so cool the one so fly/
the one who was born ready to die/
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Re: Back 2 School

Postby Xray » Aug 12th, '08, 03:25

lyrics are simple, but flow is ok. nothing special
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Over a billion Muslims, you could never stop Islam
Over a billion bullets shooting from the chopper's arm
Carry a motherfucker head that I shred in Nam
I speak literally, figuratively, the prophet gone


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Re: Back 2 School

Postby Emadyville » Aug 12th, '08, 04:15

^ agreed
Menzo wrote:Its cuz you're dope and Daddy Dubs. No one fucks with that


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Re: Back 2 School

Postby The Toy Soldier » Aug 12th, '08, 04:55

Thanks im going to try and get better words
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Re: Back 2 School

Postby Ka0t1c » Aug 12th, '08, 06:34

well good cuz its horrible
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: Back 2 School

Postby Kez » Aug 12th, '08, 11:56

Yeah pretty basic.

Stuff all heard before, you need a personal spin on it; anybody could say this.
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Re: Back 2 School

Postby Rain Matrix » Aug 12th, '08, 18:13

it was basic but it flowed well
try keeping lines about tha same length
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Re: Back 2 School

Postby Darkblade44431 » Aug 13th, '08, 02:43

Agreed, basic.
but, also, lol......bad concept imo.
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Re: Back 2 School

Postby Solace » Aug 13th, '08, 07:36

your other stuff is better than this, but i like the topic on school.
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Re: Back 2 School

Postby The Toy Soldier » Aug 14th, '08, 00:04

yeah idk guys school seems to be taking a toll on me when i posted soemthing before people would dig it now i seem to be slumping im like in writers block or something
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