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NEW STEVE SPAG - PRESSURE (MUST READ!)

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NEW STEVE SPAG - PRESSURE (MUST READ!)

Postby Steve Spag » Aug 19th, '08, 00:53

Got a lot goin' on in my life right now, and worked on this peice last night and today. Got it on a beat called "Down and Out" by Sinima on Soundclick if anyone's interested in checkin' the flow. I'm gonna use this on my LP for sure, pretty deep stuff. Hopefully you get the flow, and let me know what ya'll think.

All this pressure in my life, I get it from my friends//
And I get it from my family, and it's never gonna end//
I put it on myself, although it's not what I intend//
I just try to be the best but some people call me dence//
And you wonder why I'm tense, this ain't a joke to me//
I'm at my wits end, I ain't what I hoped to be//
I gotta vent here, everybody close to me//
Knows my soul's in broken peices//
So what am I to do? My heart is aching now//
My head is racing but, you can not break me down//
My spirit's gone and worn, I'm gonna take a bow//
There ain't no time to mourn, I gotta fake a smile//
I gotta live it up, I'm gonna leave a mark//
I'm only spittin' 'cause it's what's beatin' in my heart//
I'll never get enough, I'm gonna climb the charts//
Until the end of time, because I stride in art//

Note: "Smile" is prononuced as a slant-rhyme.

Copywright: Steven Spagnuolo 2008

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Re: NEW STEVE SPAG - PRESSURE (MUST READ!)

Postby Jay-19 » Aug 19th, '08, 02:21

Some really good shit man!

I liked the rhymes and the meaning of it, you had some really great lines up in there.
I got the flow to, and it's tight as hell. Only "bad" thing is I think the beginning could start off way better than it did, like something "punching" if you know what I mean, something that catches the attention you know. Like the ending of it, that's some heavy shit right there!

I'll never get enough, I'm gonna climb the charts//
Until the end of time, because I stride in art//


The best lines in my opinion, really good job man! :y:
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Re: NEW STEVE SPAG - PRESSURE (MUST READ!)

Postby Steve Spag » Aug 19th, '08, 04:03

KillahGoat wrote:Some really good shit man!

I liked the rhymes and the meaning of it, you had some really great lines up in there.
I got the flow to, and it's tight as hell. Only "bad" thing is I think the beginning could start off way better than it did, like something "punching" if you know what I mean, something that catches the attention you know. Like the ending of it, that's some heavy shit right there!

I'll never get enough, I'm gonna climb the charts//
Until the end of time, because I stride in art//


The best lines in my opinion, really good job man! :y:

Thanks a lot man, I really appreciate it. Glad you thought it was good, lol.
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Re: NEW STEVE SPAG - PRESSURE (MUST READ!)

Postby Robbie G » Aug 19th, '08, 05:01

I liekd it.

I can picture that as a pump up song. It might just be me but as I was reading through I started to read faster and faster it was sick. :y:
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Re: NEW STEVE SPAG - PRESSURE (MUST READ!)

Postby Solace » Aug 19th, '08, 06:24

Shady Babie wrote:I liekd it.

I can picture that as a pump up song. It might just be me but as I was reading through I started to read faster and faster it was sick. :y:


Haha thats exactly what I was thinking :D

Yeah Steve, this was awesome. Kinda those inspiring songs, you know?
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Re: NEW STEVE SPAG - PRESSURE (MUST READ!)

Postby Epidemik » Aug 19th, '08, 07:53

nice!
u should use that for a verse, record it and use it for a full song..
good flow, lyrics and fairly thought provoking.
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Re: NEW STEVE SPAG - PRESSURE (MUST READ!)

Postby Arabian Shady » Aug 19th, '08, 09:32

OMFG man, the FLOW was insane,i mean all things aside the flow was absolutely outstanding, the message was crystal, and i quote"I AINT EVEN GOTTA TELL YOU HOW SICK THIS IS" :8)
wiked shit
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We're all on the same page, Yet we're standing apart on different lines'
So when we face rage, Ya'll fake it and let THEM commit horrific crimes
50 years & going straight, Yet this performance aint worth your time,OUR
Shit is BACKSTAGE,Cause the front page aint worth Kashmir and Palestine.
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Re: NEW STEVE SPAG - PRESSURE (MUST READ!)

Postby Steve Spag » Aug 19th, '08, 10:58

Wow, thanks for the feed everyone. Really, really appreciated, but I don't even need to tell you all that, lol.
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