Confused

[The Toy Soldier]

Do I miss you, is it true?
I don't love you, yet I feel like i do
I see your pictures every day up on myspace
see your face and i space out my place and you rock my base
but how can i still have all of these feelings?
i wanna hate you, but at the time im kneeling
were only thirteen, we always kept it clean
you knew you made a mistake at that scene
i forgave you for it though even if it was obscene
i didnt bother treating you all mean
cuz i know u were influenced or so you said
and i believed you, all the bullshit you fed
i was a fool that was a sign to back off
now i see you every day wanting to jackoff
to your beautiful eyes i get this urge
to just grab you its like a power surge
you feel it one place and then all over like spasms
'scept it feels good like multiple orgasms
why do i keep feeling this shit from you
after all the false truth you put me thru
you dont know how many tantrums i had threw
cuz i had realized al lthis time i had knew
that it was to good to be true to love you
even when you said it back i knew it was deception
how could i fool myself i had a mislead perception
a wrong notion now i want nothing with you, contraconception
you can rot in hell i dont want any exceptions
to come back to me i ave you all these chances
i thought we had a future girl all of these trances
i thought i felt your love ya know all of those glances
you had given me now ur a burden like finances
everyday i want you more yet i want to repeal you
get out of my life i no longer wish to see you
your cursing me again like you did the first time
fuck it no more end of you end of this rhyme

[Arabian Shady]

dude i thought that was pretty hot man, the flow was pretty good on this one, good vocab and intresting emotion's, although i felt as tho everything was forced, u know what i mean , like all the verbosity, its good but you have to make sure it goes in the rightplaces so that it doesnt look forced,
but all in all a good drop
Peace


P.S: Could you feed mine as well , its called "FRONT PAGE",THNX

[The Toy Soldier]

dude i thought that was pretty hot man, the flow was pretty good on this one, good vocab and intresting emotion's, although i felt as tho everything was forced, u know what i mean , like all the verbosity, its good but you have to make sure it goes in the rightplaces so that it doesnt look forced,
but all in all a good drop
Peace


P.S: Could you feed mine as well , its called "FRONT PAGE",THNX

Thanks man, It means alot, I'll go check yours out.

[Slim Zaddy]

man this shit is hot. .u got style and good flow .. keep it up bro

go and cheak mine (sick of pain ) tell me what do u think about it

[The Toy Soldier]

man this shit is hot. .u got style and good flow .. keep it up bro

go and cheak mine (sick of pain ) tell me what do u think about it

thanks man

[Solace]

I liked it man, keep it up. Yeah, as Arabian Shady said, it kinda felt forced, but it was still really nice. I liked this part the best:

Do I miss you, is it true?
I don't love you, yet I feel like i do
I see your pictures every day up on myspace
suddenly I get this feeling like im in space
but how can i still have all of these feelings?
i wanna hate you, but at the time im kneeling

It kinda fell off when you said "suddenly I get this feeling like im in space", i was rather expecting a multi or something, but that was all.

I also really liked it cause it relates to something similar to me.


I think the cookie who crumbles is some how forming back together. Good job Soldier

[The Toy Soldier]

I liked it man, keep it up. Yeah, as Arabian Shady said, it kinda felt forced, but it was still really nice. I liked this part the best:

Do I miss you, is it true?
I don't love you, yet I feel like i do
I see your pictures every day up on myspace
suddenly I get this feeling like im in space
but how can i still have all of these feelings?
i wanna hate you, but at the time im kneeling

It kinda fell off when you said "suddenly I get this feeling like im in space", i was rather expecting a multi or something, but that was all.

I also really liked it cause it relates to something similar to me.

thanks il lwork on the multis


I think the cookie who crumbles is some how forming back together. Good job Soldier

[Solace]

I liked it man, keep it up. Yeah, as Arabian Shady said, it kinda felt forced, but it was still really nice. I liked this part the best:

Do I miss you, is it true?
I don't love you, yet I feel like i do
I see your pictures every day up on myspace
suddenly I get this feeling like im in space
but how can i still have all of these feelings?
i wanna hate you, but at the time im kneeling

It kinda fell off when you said "suddenly I get this feeling like im in space", i was rather expecting a multi or something, but that was all.

I also really liked it cause it relates to something similar to me.



I think the cookie who crumbles is some how forming back together. Good job Soldier

thanks il lwork on the multis

good, cause itd be so much better with just that fix.

[The Toy Soldier]

multies im not very familiar with so idk

but ifixed it so yeah