Earth's body

[neversnooze]

this is more of an experiment for me, its suppose to be about the earth's core and the human body, i hope i was able to display my point...............enjoy(poetry)


The earths inner core is a humans functional heart
sphered in with emotions, untouched by lifeless hands
a girl passed through the veins like blood
naturally she became a part of me, keeping me stable
but left one night through the arteries, destroying all balance

capillaries rise up, increasing in thickness
from solid layer to outer liquid, running out of alternatives
injection of narcotics through the veins alters my mood
eases the pain for the final blow to soothe
the next stage in the level, steps up to the mantle
as I am almost plastic, like a quartz crystal
the lust of love fades away as I turn into crust

my love capacity reached deep melancholy
thanks to a bad nutrient
the mineral potassium hit critical level
both are equivalent for essential living

[Slim Zaddy]

nice work

[mcZu]

That was nice man, if you would turn it into a rap lyric it would be even greater...
As poem it's sick

This one is my favourite:

as I am almost plastic, like a quartz crystal

[neversnooze]

i do want to write rap lyrics, i asked couple ppl on here but i got ignored haha,

thanks for the feed mcZu and z_me

[neversnooze]

thanks for the compliment mcmaybe, yea if u dont mind helping me out write lyrics id appreciate but who can i get to sing it?

[Steve Spag]

Pretty nice stuff. I like the style, real thoughfull.
Keep it up

[enjinn]

real nice concept...you worked well with it