The Lone troop 9/11 trib.

[The Toy Soldier]

(Comlink) just a few moments ago, what is believed to be an airplane has crashed into the south tower of the World Trade Center.....

Lead us to our strong point, to the better
let us remmeber those wh odies at the world trade center
ill always remmewber those who died in the line of duty
because i choose to do the same i serve for my country
this is my home, my crib, my palcae my throne.
I share it with my fellow citizens... I Protect it to the bone
in which my pride has ever thrived and taught me to survive in the midst of death
but i aint deaf i understand this plea to help my country in its time of need
so the message is to be heeded this neads to be readed
no time for grammar we need to be leaded
to stop those who wish to destroy our unity
we may not be the best but u make us look like purity
a trait osama needs to be a real human
these acts hes caused on us al lof the pain
we will prevail over him we wil reign

[chorus]
because im the lone troop
im in all the scoop
from a fireman...
to the loop
ill fight from the middle east to the left
im like a beast that feels the need to theft


you stole our lives stole our citizens
u think ur best cuz u have no sentiments
u think we are here to steal everyones land
wel lur little warning has got us bland
congrats u fucker u got urself a holiday
haha we the ones laughing we hunt u everyday
u will be caught ur life no longwer is peaceful
everywhere you go youll always be on the run
to bad that you gonna miss on all the fun
osama lemme tel lit to you straight
lemme give you an insight into mine and your's fate
im going to hunt you because im the lone troop
dont worry bout running cuz im in the loop...

[SajN]

2nd verse had a better structure.. better flow imo

No "special" rhymes, but they were ok.

this is my home, my crib, my palcae my throne.
I share it with my fellow citizens... I Protect it to the bone

I liked this


Keep it up!

[The Toy Soldier]

2nd verse had a better structure.. better flow imo

No "special" rhymes, but they were ok.

this is my home, my crib, my palcae my throne.
I share it with my fellow citizens... I Protect it to the bone

I liked this


Keep it up!

thank you very much

[Solace]

2nd verse had a better structure.. better flow imo

No "special" rhymes, but they were ok.

this is my home, my crib, my palcae my throne.
I share it with my fellow citizens... I Protect it to the bone

I liked this


Keep it up!

I liked that line too

i also liked the chorus, thought it was nice. itd make more sense saying "east to west" instead of "east to left". but they btoh mean the same thing anyways.

Good job, as usual Toy Soldier. Good meaning to it too.

[The Toy Soldier]

2nd verse had a better structure.. better flow imo

No "special" rhymes, but they were ok.

this is my home, my crib, my palcae my throne.
I share it with my fellow citizens... I Protect it to the bone

I liked this


Keep it up!

I liked that line too

i also liked the chorus, thought it was nice. itd make more sense saying "east to west" instead of "east to left". but they btoh mean the same thing anyways.

Good job, as usual Toy Soldier. Good meaning to it too.

thanks practice makes perfect right?