Football-team rhymes.

[Jay-19]

Just something I came up with when I was watching a football game.

I'm kicking more balls to hell than Manchester City
I squeeze girl-boobs, you think a man-chest is pretty
straight up you can compare my crew with Arsenal
the way we score all the time, how we're stars and all
and you keep on falling off kinda like Leeds United
all the shit I just wrote, you'll need weed to write it
I never quite seem to make it, like Tottenham see
and I bring the flavor to the game like cotton-candy
but I need to bring fear on the corners like Roma
toughen up and put all of my opponents in comas
I'm kicking your balls hard like Manchester United
last night you're sucking on a man-chest and liked it

[Steve Spag]

hahahaha, pretty sick man.
you had some pretty witty punchlines in there, deffinetly had a few good laughs, haha.
it just flowed soo nicely together.

"I'm kicking more balls to hell than Manchester City
I squeeze girl-boobs, you think a man-chest is pretty
straight up you can compare my crew with Arsenal
the way we score all the time, how we're stars and all
and you keep on falling off kinda like Leeds United
all the shit I just wrote, you'll need weed to write it"

that's my fav. part, especially that last line, haha.

[Xray]

^^word.

dope piece man, structure is fucking DOPE!

last night you're sucking on a man-chest and liked it

last night you sucked on a mans chest and like it...thats the only negative thing to say.

[Emadyville]

very nice shit, impressive

[Sleepy]

good shit man

[Jay-19]

Thanks ya'll!

[,-,'-{Bar}-',-,]

would have liked more wordplay when dropping the team names instead of just using them straight but was a good peice

[Jay-19]

would have liked more wordplay when dropping the team names instead of just using them straight but was a good peice

Yeah, that would've been greater, but since I came up with this while watching a game and wrote it down real quick, it's as good as it can be in my opinion.

[,-,'-{Bar}-',-,]

would have liked more wordplay when dropping the team names instead of just using them straight but was a good peice

Yeah, that would've been greater, but since I came up with this while watching a game and wrote it down real quick, it's as good as it can be in my opinion.

but I need to bring fear on the corners like Roma
toughen up and put all of my opponents in comas

i need to bring fear to the pitch, like i smell An Aroma (A Roma) Player
Toughen up and put all the opossition in the coma layer

same line second one is using wordplay and makes it more pleasing, and has a multi, it took me 4 seconds to think of that so im sure if even if you wrote it quick you could ge back over it and drop the names in with wordplay to make it alot better, right now its just direct comparisons to football teams witch isnt very creative.

[Jay-19]

but I need to bring fear on the corners like Roma
toughen up and put all of my opponents in comas

This rhyme was kind of an metaphor though. The corners referring to the "corners on the street". So I was a little creative anyway, don't you think?

[,-,'-{Bar}-',-,]

but I need to bring fear on the corners like Roma
toughen up and put all of my opponents in comas

This rhyme was kind of an metaphor though. The corners referring to the "corners on the street". So I was a little creative anyway, don't you think?

thats not a metaphor thats wordplay, and sketchy word play because roma bring fear on corners Kicks thats all good but the the city roma bringing fears on corner streets ? a city cant bring fear on streets places or people in the city do that (like gangs ect.)

it is a little creative im just trying to point out how you could improve it, i aint hating lol

[Jay-19]

but I need to bring fear on the corners like Roma
toughen up and put all of my opponents in comas

This rhyme was kind of an metaphor though. The corners referring to the "corners on the street". So I was a little creative anyway, don't you think?

thats not a metaphor thats wordplay, and sketchy word play because roma bring fear on corners Kicks thats all good but the the city roma bringing fears on corner streets ? a city cant bring fear on streets places or people in the city do that (like gangs ect.)

it is a little creative im just trying to point out how you could improve it, i aint hating lol

No, I know you're not hating. And I see your point. Thanks for pointing things out, helps me get better.

[SajN]

haha, it was cool

[Jay-19]

haha, it was cool

Thanks man!

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