"No God" (Fly to the Moon)

[Ka0t1c]

"No God"

i wanna make things all right but it's so tough to do

still i won't give up the fight until that does comes thru

i know the time has got tight and my mind had lost sight

but i've found a new light and i'm findin it soon

it's like i was blinded by fright and it tried to consume

cuz the violence supplied my eyes to assume

the signs i'd invite and illume

it wasn't quite a delight to resume my flight to the root

so i arrived in a room where it just might be my tomb

cuz the life which i write can drive me to prove

even my size could remove the giant, he's who

we've decided should rule cuz the might really fools

the wise ones, good move

im my own pilot, i'll fly to the "moon"

[Emadyville]

Not as good as your others. I could see the internal rhyming and shit, which was good to see, but it sounded more like a poem then a verse to me, idk that might have been the idea, either way it's not bad

[Steve Spag]

^^
Agreeed.

Pretty good, but you can deffinetly do better.
Keep it up man.

[Ka0t1c]

ok, thanx