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Suffering

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Suffering

Postby Ka0t1c » Sep 29th, '08, 02:55

will it ever end, my suffering before i'm dead my friend
cuz nothing seems anymore lovely dreams
no form of medicine can become my vaccine
it is showing evident, i was born within a horror scene

so now my head does spin, oh Lord, is this really happening?
will i spend an immortal destiny in eternal agony?
when shall it pass from me, that's surely rapidly burning
assuring catastrophe on my immaculate journey

how inaccurate everything has been actually lately has damaged my self esteem
bringing negative feelings, i'm angry
i aint back into safety, i'm dealing out wrath
in action's my instincts to activate that

TO BE CONTINUED???
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: Suffering

Postby Emadyville » Sep 29th, '08, 03:11

Different. I usually don't like shit that doesn't rhyme, if you'd record it though I think it would be tight. Looked at more of poetry than rap tho.
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Re: Suffering

Postby Ka0t1c » Sep 29th, '08, 03:20

it does rhyme fairly well if u rap it somewhat fast bu
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Re: Suffering

Postby Ka0t1c » Sep 29th, '08, 03:21

it does rhyme fairly well if u rap it somewhat fast but there is one part that doesn't exactly rhyme but the endings are similar
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