I need feedback

[shadyem]

Hey!

Just had a read and I thought it was sweet! Had to agree with peeps about the last line, but now you have changed it I propa love it!

My fave bit xx

When we grab the mic it’s our life and property,
Properly spit sick shit with no apology,

[Xray]

definitely deserve feedback

good shit man, good flow to.

When we grab the mic it’s our life and property,
Properly spit sick shit with no apology,

^loved that

EDIT: i didn't see the person above me post i swear i didn't jack my post from hers

[mcZu]

^Meaning she is your soulmate.....

[Xray]

^Meaning she is your soulmate.....

i must travel to england and see for myself

[Emadyville]

Thank you all for the feed.

[mcZu]

Yeah it defintly sounds/flows better now you have fixed it
I already said it, this is nice verse

@Xray: Can you afford a ticket to the U.K, 'cause if you can you should go...

[Xray]

@Xray: Can you afford a ticket to the U.K, 'cause if you can you should go...

yeah if i had the money i'd definitely go, not for the soul mate matter just cause i wanna walk around and curse with that accent FOHKIN BASTARD!! and maybe make a "lock, stock & two smoking barrels" situation happen

sorry for messing with your thread yo

[shadyem]

^Meaning she is your soulmate.....

Meaning great minds think alike xx

[Xray]

^Meaning she is your soulmate.....

Meaning great minds think alike xx

ohh shit someone just got told

[Emadyville]

sorry for messing with your thread yo

Yeah come on people

[Solace]

Dude that was ill. Just ill. Cant wait to hear that shit. And the change to the ending was better, i didnt like how it "stood out".

EDIT: your getting signed? Whats the name of the label.

[Emadyville]

Dude that was ill. Just ill. Cant wait to hear that shit. And the change to the ending was better, i didnt like how it "stood out".

EDIT: your getting signed? Whats the name of the label.

Stoney Ent. It's just a local label, but they have a decent local following and lyrically I think I will shine. They're a bunch of stoners so I think I have that edge too lol.

BTW thank for the feed, gladd everyone seemed to like it.

[Solace]

Haha, cool man.

[<Stiiccy>]

We ain’t from the hood, we ain’t gangsters,
We don’t shoot shoot, but our music is bangers,
Enough of the who’s who, we ain’t strangers,
We just live to write, the studio’s our chambers

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ok if you spit this you need to be as "white" as posible lol
that will get the message across more..

ive heard this subject a million times...no one ever does it right but you could be on to somthing