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Unmask My Faults

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Unmask My Faults

Postby Ka0t1c » Oct 1st, '08, 04:16

you have no idea how bad i feel
but i'm mad as Hell
and this can not heal
still i have to tell
bout the crap i deal with
the traps they'll build
i adapt a lil bit
yet i cast the spells
and broadcastin: reelin's
my actual realm
well crafted, sealed in
who's graphed my realm
black magic villains?
i ask myself but that won't help-when
will the tragic halt and the filth end?
to catipult passed my guilt trip:
unmask my faults as the field flips
cuz i'd relatch my vault, relax and chill bits
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: Unmask My Faults

Postby Emadyville » Oct 1st, '08, 05:42

Need to continue in my opinion before you post this stuff man, it leaves you wondering. Finish and post!
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Re: Unmask My Faults

Postby Urban Punk » Oct 1st, '08, 15:11

I loved it! flow was great and there were some really nice line's in there, :y: you should finish it and post up the rest bro
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Re: Unmask My Faults

Postby Ka0t1c » Oct 1st, '08, 22:02

thanx but i dunno when or if this will be finished but i'll work on it if i get enough positive feedback
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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