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Hit Em Up 4

Postby Requiem » Oct 5th, '08, 20:12

shadymademe (epiphany), inspired me to do this. and for almost half of this, it can stand next to both Em's, and Tupac's originals cuz it has the same flow and rhyming style. after half, it basically goes off on my own thing.

first off, fuck ur style, and the money u make,
call me white, but at least i'm not called a fake,
u say u hustlin by day, and killin by night,
but both u and me know u aint never been in a fight,
by now u should accept, that i'm better at this,
u act retarted, attractin wack rhymes like magnets,
an' i'm just lovin' how u keep runnin from me,
u just hatin' that u can't hide behind ur money,
just keep on sucking, cuz homey i'll beat ya,
i'm hot like a fever, u prayin for me to release ya,
but u best believe my cd's sellin on the streets,
all ya beats sound cheap, and ur rhyme's is all weak,
and when my lp leaks, it actually gets peeped,
cuz i reak havoc whenever i speak,
u think u could be on the same level as me,
but u must be livin in a field of dreams,
cuz u can't match me, i'll rip u at the seams,
u aint got no self esteem, i always reign supreme,
u wasn't ever fire, all u was and ever will be is steam.

plz comment, and prpz to shadymademe for the inspiration :8)
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Re: Hit Em Up 4

Postby mcZu » Oct 5th, '08, 20:14

Not bad at all,liked the second part more 'cause that had your own style :y:
But first part was great too :y:
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Re: Hit Em Up 4

Postby Solace » Oct 5th, '08, 20:16

Sick man :worship: first sentence was a great way to start off.
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first off, fuck ur style, and the money u make,
call me white, but at least i'm not called a fake,"
glad i inspired you.

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Re: Hit Em Up 4

Postby Requiem » Oct 5th, '08, 20:29

@ mczu, thx man :happy:
@ shadymademe, thx too. good feedback encourages me to keep doing this. u kno :8)
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Re: Hit Em Up 4

Postby Requiem » Oct 6th, '08, 00:31

c'mon, bump! :8)
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Re: Hit Em Up 4

Postby enjinn » Oct 6th, '08, 20:55

good shit fam!
each one teaches one
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Re: Hit Em Up 4

Postby Requiem » Oct 6th, '08, 23:10

enjinn wrote:good shit fam!



thx, man :happy: i'm going to be very active on tr now. so look out steve spag, and audio stage too. :8)
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Re: Hit Em Up 4

Postby Steve Spag » Oct 7th, '08, 20:56

Pretty sick man, like the flow for it, and there were a couple nice punchlines in there.

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i'll rip u at the seams,

When I first started my shit I used to say that a lot, lol.

Good shit, keep it up!
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Re: Hit Em Up 4

Postby Requiem » Oct 8th, '08, 22:02

thx man, every comment i get pumps me to keep doin this :8)
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