Reality..

[Slim Zaddy]

Well life is an outcome let it come then get it run
Take it seriously act maturely dont take it for fun , done
Sometimes it backfires so badly on you
Sometimes it’s get u luck ya that’s true
Sometimes it lure you into something bad
Most of the times it gets u so badly mad
Just get it as it’s that’s the truth is it
Let me spit some staff I will not regret it
Life shows me enough but I’m stick to it
Will I’m trying to flirt wit a girl
I’m trying to develop a goof affair
I know where she’s she’s always right there
In my mind and my heart flowing in me everywhere
She’s a good ethical chick
I need to make a click to tick her to me with respect
First flirt then get her feel great
Second blink let her notice your wink
Third talk to her let her know that u all into her
Then act like a man don’t be a fag
Be glad wit her don’t diss her just miss her and kiss her always reminisce her
Treat her well, will so she can be a good girl
Make her twirl, whirl, let her be your only girl, such a lovely affair
Well I’m good man with no luck
My life always stand for me it block for me everything I just had enough
All of the staff i had and wnt to have is like a dream that cud nver been reach
My life is like an open speech that never ends it’s just a useless seeds
I pretend to be cool, but inside me I’m blowing I feel like I have no use
Girls thinks I’ma perversion, I need to make an excursion
Life to me acts like an invasion, but I’m still version
I get much dirt then, i need to skim them and start a flirt then

well hope u will like it this time .. need ur opionions . either it's good or bad ..

[Slim Zaddy]

COMMON GUYS ,, NEED SOME FEEDBACK,,,

[lilrossy]

im still learnin myself but ima have to say, dat was pretty bad. i wasn't feelin da flow, seemed like da rhymes were all ova da place.

[Slim Zaddy]

im still learnin myself but ima have to say, dat was pretty bad. i wasn't feelin da flow, seemed like da rhymes were all ova da place.

okay, man i will try to be better next time. thnks for your opinion

[Solace]

Im gunna have to say i agree with Lilrossy.

I couldnt flow with it, it was like lines with 5 words then instantly a group of sentences 13 words each. Hope you know what i mean. The concept is good tho. Im not saying i can do better (i admit it, i suck :P), but i needa tell others to improve too, you know what i mean?

Eg. How does this rhyme at all?

Third talk to her let her know that u all into her
Then act like a man don’t be a fag

And those lines were horrible either way. "Dont act like a fag"? Thats kinda...
But not all lines were , like these 2 were nice.

My life is like an open speech that never ends it’s just a useless seeds
I pretend to be cool, but inside me I’m blowing I feel like I have no use

Anyways, be better next try.

[Slim Zaddy]

Im gunna have to say i agree with Lilrossy.

I couldnt flow with it, it was like lines with 5 words then instantly a group of sentences 13 words each. Hope you know what i mean. The concept is good tho. Im not saying i can do better (i admit it, i suck :P), but i needa tell others to improve too, you know what i mean?

Eg. How does this rhyme at all?

Third talk to her let her know that u all into her
Then act like a man don’t be a fag

And those lines were horrible either way. "Dont act like a fag"? Thats kinda...
But not all lines were , like these 2 were nice.

My life is like an open speech that never ends it’s just a useless seeds
I pretend to be cool, but inside me I’m blowing I feel like I have no use

Anyways, be better next try.

no shadymademe i agree wit u ,, and i do really respect ur opinion ,, and dont say that u sucks , just try to give a motivation to yourself so u could do better ,, we're here to do better ,, and ya after looked at it myself ,, i figure out that there are some lines sucks .. i will be better next time .. gd luck man ,,

[Solace]

Thanks man