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Sick (Freestyle)

Postby Requiem » Oct 22nd, '08, 04:21

just a little something i whipped up while chatting with djblue (aka Verbal Touch). crushed him in the verbal battle. :whistle:

Lil Wayne, he aint straight outta compton, he's straight out of a gutter
So why in his songs does he always have to stutter?
i know at his concerts that crickets are near,
cuz when he's on stage, that's all i hear.
now i'ma switch this into a whole 'nother gear.
let me make this clear, i'm to be feared
my lines stab like a spear, i'll leave u in tears.
so just watch as i let loose the torrent of my career.
either that or u'll see me naked in ur rearview mirror,
slong floppin up and down like a fish on a pier,
with a banana in my hand, ready to stick in ur rear.
I'm just sick like that, u callin me weird?
aren't u the same person who use to bump to britney spears?


just letting ya'll taste some of this ice killa flavor. don't know why that sounded so stupid, but whatever. i'm just letting loose. i'ma record it eventually. along with my other freestyles, so expect more audio tracks soon. :8)
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Re: Sick (Freestyle)

Postby Requiem » Oct 22nd, '08, 20:06

oh c'mon, bump! i wanna hear some feedback. :(
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Re: Sick (Freestyle)

Postby Solace » Oct 22nd, '08, 21:41

:laughing: that was fucking sick :y: Seriosuly, it would have taken me a while to even write that, and you freestyled it. Good job. It was ill
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Re: Sick (Freestyle)

Postby Requiem » Oct 22nd, '08, 21:56

^thx man, especialy love that slong part :o
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Re: Sick (Freestyle)

Postby Tash8 » Oct 24th, '08, 04:28

work on your rhymes, cuz their REAL simple... besides that it was decent.
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Re: Sick (Freestyle)

Postby Requiem » Oct 24th, '08, 05:14

@ chet, thx man. i try...

@ tash, thx again. i know my rhymes is simple, i mean, i try hard to get it to rhyme perfectly, and have it flow together. sometimes the punch line isn't as effective as i think it is while i'm writing it :sweating:
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Re: Sick (Freestyle)

Postby Rain Matrix » Oct 24th, '08, 06:55

nice stuff... after lolipop he kind of had this coming, lol
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Re: Sick (Freestyle)

Postby Requiem » Oct 26th, '08, 17:46

lmao, in the lollipop video, if u listen carefully, u can hear the suckage. :o
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