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I Aint Afraid

Postby Requiem » Oct 29th, '08, 22:31

I'm just starting a song, cuz i kinda feel like rapping right now :8)

Chorus

I will hit ya boy,
I aint afraid to swing on nobody,
I will hit ya man,
I aint afraid to swing on nobody...

Verse 1

Two people on my left, whisperin' smack,
cuz they can't say it to my face, and only to my back,
and when i turn around, the voices drift away,
it's makin' me mad, i'm gonna swing on someone today...
cuz all they doin is talkin, y don't u put a sock in it?
u just lookin for a fight, but u aint backin' sh*t.
Alright, john, calm down, walk away...
be a bigger man, let em drive in they own bullsh*t lane.
oh, look, he whimpin' out Yo what the f*ck you say?
I been at my table, mindin my manners,
hearin' ur whispers, but controllin my anger,
now u wanna keep the sh*t up? aight, well here's a message...
I'ma knock some sense into u, that's ur first lesson.
Come back here, b*tch, i aint done teachin yet,
the next thing i'ma teach u is a thing called respect."
I said as i drove him through a chair, and punched him in the stomach.
We causin' a scene in this restaurant, i can see the Manager comin,
oh, now u start runnin? I knew u dogs was nuthin but bark,
u can go ahead and run, i'm only givin u a head start...

Chorus
repeat 2x

Verse 2

talking about my mama, r u really that deranged?
do u really wanna hit on someone twice ur age?
get back here, why u still runnin away?
still talkin sh*t, is u really that afraid?
what, u can't take a stand, fight like a man,
that just shows u how far ahead u plan,
cuz u didn't expect me to actually react,
u dissed me, how did u want me to act?
and now u disabled, u can't attack,
cuz i'm facin u now, and u can't see my back.
one punch and ur head'll be dented in from the impact.
concussion comes after that, with a fat crack in ur skull,
and i don't feel remorse or nothing, cuz u had it coming.
u callin for help like someone's actually gonna do something,
people here already know me,
and they gonna say you started the whole thing.
wipe urself off man, the way u squintin u look like someone from beijing.

Chorus
repeat 2x
Last edited by Requiem on Nov 1st, '08, 18:02, edited 3 times in total.
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Re: I Aint Afraid (unfinished)

Postby Solace » Oct 29th, '08, 22:33

Nice :y:

Werent any OH SHIT punchllines but it was very consistent and the lines were good. Ending of first verse was good. I chuckled at this

be a bigger man, let em drive in they own bullsh*t lane.
oh, look, he whimpin' out Yo what the f*ck you say?


Anyways, keep it up :y:
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Re: I Aint Afraid (unfinished)

Postby Emadyville » Oct 29th, '08, 22:35

The flow kind of ruined it made it hard to read, rhymes were pretty basic, I like the concept though. Write your second verse and post it and I'll feed it.
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Re: I Aint Afraid (unfinished)

Postby Requiem » Oct 29th, '08, 22:36

lmao, ^ thx man. it wasn't meant to be a super punch knock out. just sort of a "don't approach me" type of song :8)

@ emadyville, the flow's sort of slow. and yea, when i get verse 2 done. i'll post it :y:
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Re: I Aint Afraid (unfinished)

Postby Emadyville » Oct 29th, '08, 22:40

IceKilla wrote:lmao, ^ thx man. it wasn't meant to be a super punch knock out. just sort of a "don't approach me" type of song :8)

@ emadyville, the flow's sort of slow. and yea, when i get verse 2 done. i'll post it :y:


Thanks man, it's just reading it was hard to put rhymes together cause some lines were longer or had more syllables, but I think it has potential, so yeah post the second I'll feed.
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Re: I Aint Afraid (unfinished)

Postby gladimnotsoluble » Oct 30th, '08, 00:32

Chet Starr wrote:like the chorus..it reminds me of someone i can't remember...i like the verse, i see you trying a little something different with it


i don't like the chorus actually. Some of the verses are pretty good, work on that flow though. but it's nice you can defintely work with it. the chorus is too boring/ not complex enough
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Re: I Aint Afraid

Postby Requiem » Nov 1st, '08, 18:01

there, finished the song.

thx for all the comments. let me know what u think of the completed version :8)
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