Some Punchlines

[Xray]

Just some random punches i just jotted down, was gonna go to sleep but i gotta write a shit load for a project so Im pushing, anyways i thought some of this was funny, nothing wow but here it goes.

Note: its not edited or finished.

Your like virgin in this rap shit, tryna ta pull a mary//
look pussy, fuck with me, and i will pop that cherry//
Im like a black hole, spreading in your chest//
Im breast cancer, eating your inner flesh//
your falling in love with me, Im in your heart//
you bold bitches ain't my type, lesbos you are//
I don't date witches, I date calendars//
I've been hitting it since the 90's, couldn't challenge us//
punch perfectionist, without a license even given//
without a degree, the violence in my lines are spitten//

I personally lol'd at the first 6 lines, leave whatever feed as you wish.

[Arabian Shady]

some of them were good, some were ayte
its like a collection of puches put together right??lol
peace

[Xray]

some of them were good, some were ayte
its like a collection of puches put together right??lol
peace

nope not a collection lol. i read it a few times and i realized how fuckin wack this is. omg! ain't gonna write when im about to sleep.....AGAIN!

[Solace]

the only one that was really good was the calender one. the rest were average. good job tho, i cant do much better than that.

[mcZu]

Not bad, but not special either, they are aight...
I agree with shadymademe, the calender punch is genius

[jigglinj]

that was a little brutal and weird I like it! just like slim shady

[neversnooze]

the first half it was reall strong and the second half fell off

liked how u described marry and virgin(popping the cherry) good one

[Emadyville]

They aren't great but they aren't bad either. Respect to you cause I'd do much worse

[Rain Matrix]

that's a hell of a start to any diss, battle, or whatever may come yur way

good job

[Xray]

damn thanks for the feed guys, and yeah I want to get myself use to writing punches so thanks for the feed

[James R.]

Pretty average. None really jumped out at me as "HOLY SHIT THAT WAS SICK!" but you could get there. It did seem more like a collection of random punches, and if you were just writing for punchlines that's probably a big problem you had. If you're battling you can keep building up of the previous punches because it's personal. When you're not aiming them towards anyone it's more difficult to make them have that pop to them because it's like shooting up in the air. Not as impressive as shooting a target ya know?

[Robbie G]

I liked them all but I thought the lesbo one was weak.

[Xray]

Pretty average. None really jumped out at me as "HOLY SHIT THAT WAS SICK!" but you could get there. It did seem more like a collection of random punches, and if you were just writing for punchlines that's probably a big problem you had. If you're battling you can keep building up of the previous punches because it's personal. When you're not aiming them towards anyone it's more difficult to make them have that pop to them because it's like shooting up in the air. Not as impressive as shooting a target ya know?

Word bro, thanks alot for your feedback bro, really means something because its so fucking right

[Tash8]

some where pretty good man others i was like wtf?

but the best diss line ever is this, it's a diss to bar btw

nurse look at this Bar, it's crooked!

meaning he's gay, get it, get it?