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depressed - verse

Postby Slim Zaddy » Nov 7th, '08, 19:35

There are certain aspects in life you have to accept,
When your friends cheat on you, you feel like shit,
Now you have many questions but no one is being attention,
Let me then mention that deep thinking is the prescription,
Being helpless won’t get u help but will bring u more illness,
Man skip this, don’t listen to this shit go get a rest be freshness,
Clear your thoughts, slow your thinking, think to the best,
Take advices, initialize it, socialize it, and spread it to your guests,
You can improve , you can prove that by your moves,
Make a step forward forget the past look ahead and muse,
Look beside a new life will arise use it hold it in your eyes,
Don’t be fright that’s life rights, glance at it keep it in your sight all day and night,


feedback would be appreciated :)
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Re: depressed - verse

Postby Slim Zaddy » Nov 8th, '08, 16:18

commin guys ,, just tell me is good or bad .. feed it
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Re: depressed - verse

Postby MC Anonymous » Nov 8th, '08, 16:33

This was pretty good! Some of the lines didn't rhyme to me? idk maybe it's just my rookieness showing lol ;) but I liked it. Good Job!
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Re: depressed - verse

Postby Rain Matrix » Nov 8th, '08, 16:44

I liked it a lot, depending on how u pronounce these slant rhymes it was all good
but I'd try to avoid using them in tha future but for now... keep dropping :y:
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Re: depressed - verse

Postby mcZu » Nov 8th, '08, 18:32

Not bad I enjoyed reading it, I agree sort off with the rest..
Just keep on writing and dropping those pieces :y:
keep it up :y:
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Re: depressed - verse

Postby Slim Zaddy » Nov 9th, '08, 09:48

well thanks all .. i really appreciate your opinions ,, :worship:
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