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Broken Emotions

Postby Rain Matrix » Dec 18th, '08, 05:13

the matrix isn't hated for his fakeness or being evasive
face it I'm not complacent I often demonstrate this
when spitting words that rhyme and tho I'm hurt at times
I still merc rap fine without your tracks lines
so what's next I can sense a threat
ya guessed I'm not tha best and I agree
a memory of me equals an mc that was lucky
enough to have fans tho rapping was his last plan
he can still tap dance on the face of a bad man
someone tell the reaper I'll do it myself so why help
it's time to try hell this world was too happy when I Fell
so remember when I battled like a retard crazy
no more ego just one more post on TRshady
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Re: Broken Emotions

Postby Emadyville » Dec 18th, '08, 07:48

I always enjoy your shit, and i enjoyed this, beginning rhymes were sick :y:
Menzo wrote:Its cuz you're dope and Daddy Dubs. No one fucks with that


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Re: Broken Emotions

Postby Ka0t1c » Dec 18th, '08, 14:46

...spitting words that rhyme and tho I'm hurt at times


that part was put in well... also overall this piece was good
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: Broken Emotions

Postby Rain Matrix » Dec 18th, '08, 16:35

thanks guys, I just needed to vent some frustrations
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Re: Broken Emotions

Postby Slim Zaddy » Dec 18th, '08, 21:31

it's dope man i liked it .. keep it up :y:
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z_em = Slim Zaddy = Zaid AQ which is my real name
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Re: Broken Emotions

Postby The GameKeeper » Dec 18th, '08, 21:48

That shit was dope man... :y:
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Re: Broken Emotions

Postby James R. » Dec 20th, '08, 00:17

My favorite thing about it was that you were able to pack it all into such a short spit. Short, sweet, and too the point. I liked it a lot. And the flow was spot on. Good job with that. Very well done.
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