Just a little piece that I wrote

[Sam.]

Interesting content. Try and expanded the concept a bit next time. Multis and flow were pretty good. Work on the structure, please, damn it.

[Sam.]

Next time maybe?

[Just Silver]

Very good shit keep writing structure sucks but lyrics make up for it

But definitely impressed

[Mr.DGAF]

I find nowadays structuring rhymes isn't as important as I thought. I mean, look at how Eminem structures his shit. I suppose when all we have to judge are the lyrics, you have to address it but in the higher picture structure of bars is pretty much irrelevant.

As for this piece, really liked the flow and internals. Internals actually really really helped this piece. You always got some dope subject matter and even for a quick jot this is rather dope. Good shit dude.

[Snakebeast]

The rhyming is fantastic, natural, and creative. Pretty standard concept. And I actually LOVED the way you structured this piece. It flows fine imo.

[Francesco]

Some dope lines in there... Good drop Hesky!

[Sam.]

I find nowadays structuring rhymes isn't as important as I thought. I mean, look at how Eminem structures his shit. I suppose when all we have to judge are the lyrics, you have to address it but in the higher picture structure of bars is pretty much irrelevant.

Eminem writes to a beat.

[Sam.]

That wasn't the point. I think Mr.DGAF understood.

[Trimss]

I don't really care about the structure to be quite honest, it's the last thing I pay attention to when I read a writing piece.

This was great Hesky.

[Sam.]

I don't really care about the structure to be quite honest, it's the last thing I pay attention to when I read a writing piece.

I'd hate myself If I say I disagree. Structure being an important part of writing, can't be( and sometimes can be) ignored. Like this verse by MC Anon:

The lyric supremisist above analysis mic hand covered in calluses, shattering through challenges Taking over palaces,
fornicating the queens with malice, my chalices overflowing to the brim with evil deeds
Make you experience what people see when they're at their final moments of living,
with demons suckin' their energies they're paralyzed on the bed,
with voices that they're unfamilar with,
they try to scream but they can't move their lips grim reaper in the flesh taking heads,
making death beds, writing with bone marrow instead of lead,
I'll leave a mall abandoned,by shooting it with a cannon
I'll crush it,pick it up and throw it off the fucking planet
You wanna mess with the best,
I don't understand it My stare alone can pierce a hole inside the granite
I'll leave you bleeding,as your receiving the final blow The only light you see,
is from my fuckin' pistol's glow

[Sam.]

Yeah, everyone has one of his own. Audio mainly covers it. Talking about Anon, that was his 1st verse, here is his second from the same song:

You think I give a damn if that's your fuckin' girl stupid?
I'll stretch your girl's vagina wide enough to step through it
You talk a lot of shit but you never get to it
You say that you're the best, why don't you fuckin' prove it?
Instead of acting like you're hard on your facebook
You disgrace, look, nobody comments your space, crook
Look at your girl's waist, cuts on her damn hips
Inidicate that you don't enough for her, Awh shit
Little bitch, how the fuck you gonna tell me shit like
''I don't like her, she's nothing but just a big fight''
SIck dyke, get the fuck off of my friends list
before you meet heaven's entrace from my damn fist.
Bland bitch, go make me a fuckin' sandwich
Have you ambushed, punched in the face, hands switch
stabbed in the jaw, cut throat, ears sliced off
hang your body up and have the birds peck your eyes off

See the difference, yeah?

[Sam.]

I thought of that too. Peace.

[Francesco]

Anytime homie... Keep 'em coming.