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My version of Cleaning Out My Closet

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My version of Cleaning Out My Closet

Postby Inzanity » Oct 27th, '05, 03:51

yo

where's my life

I'm emotionally dead yo

yea

yo, yo

Have u ever been abused or missused by family or friends// I have I've been melested and brused by family and friends// Wicked times// with wicked crimes// look at the ryemes// sick as the mother fucking man thats in mind// all these hopeless emotions run deep as notions unfolding//hatred twords parents for doing nothing but knowing// anger inside from not coping// hell i wanna stop breathing// having flashbacks of those mournings not doing nothing but greving// leaving with a hate as deep as hells mouth// see it gets to me but I won't let it bring me down// Look at me wow// ur gonna get pissed at me now// cause' i'mma bitch at u now//

Tell me momma// y u let him get away// he should've been jail bate// and now I'm here cleaning out my closet//one more time// I said Tell me momma// y u let him get away// he should've been jail bate//and now I'm here cleaning out my closet//

yo I got no love cause' I lost it// I no longer know how to show it// but theres a reason fo' it// and I'mma make sure everyone knows it// I'll take u back to 93'// before I ever knew how to ryeme u see// I was a kid mabey I was just only six years// my faggot uncle musta had his panties up in his rear// cause' he's sick I wished he would die// and when he gets out of jail I hope he dosn't come around to say hi// I look at Martel and I couldn't picture leaving him with that guy// cause I really do hate him and I'd do my best to just try// to keep him away and make sure that he's safe// I'll do whatever it takes// I know I'm only 18 but I'm old enough to put a man in his grave// wat he did was stupid no dout it was dumb// he's never done anything smart he was always a bum// and I'mma kill him put a bullet in his dome// it's my life I'd like to welcome ya'll to the place I call home//

Tell me momma// y u let him get away// he should've been jail bate// and now I'm here cleaning out my closet//one more time// I said Tell me momma// y u let him get away// he should've been jail bate//and now I'm here cleaning out my closet//

Now I'mma bitch at u momma and u know y I'm bitching// take a second just listen// put urself in my position// just try to invision// being sexuall abused in the family room while ur moms right next door in the kitchen// listen// I'm on a payback mission// going through emotional breakdowns// full of nothing but hate now// my whole life I was told it gets better but it dosen't// now I've grown up and u know it didn't just happen to me it happened to my cousins// y didn't u tell the police on him ma' ?// It was too embarresing ha' ? // but guess wat ur getting older now and I'll soon be moving out// and Martel's growning up so quick he's gonna know wat ur about// and once I move out believe I'm not coming back to this house// thats for sure no dout// see wat hurts me the most is u won't admit he was wrong// so go along// keep telling urself that jail isn't where he belongs// but how dare u try to say wat he did wasen't wrong// u stupid bitch// I hope u fucking pay worse then he did// Remember when Lenny died and u adopted the Martel// Well if he tries it to him I'll send him to hell//

Tell me momma// y u let him get away// he should've been jail bate// and now I'm here cleaning out my closet//one more time// I said Tell me momma// y u let him get away// he should've been jail bate//and now I'm here cleaning out my closet//
Last edited by Inzanity on Oct 27th, '05, 22:16, edited 2 times in total.
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Postby Inzanity » Oct 27th, '05, 12:31

Thanx man
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Postby HAYZI » Oct 27th, '05, 14:04

very good i was really impressed ;)
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Postby jhoni_slimshady » Oct 27th, '05, 14:16

Lol

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Postby Hunneh_Buns » Oct 27th, '05, 14:48

Wow this is really good.
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Postby misa » Oct 27th, '05, 15:05

=D> =D> =D> tht was good for reall an yea stay here :happy:
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Postby Tomega » Oct 27th, '05, 16:24

damn thats sick
it fits well
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Postby niknacks » Oct 27th, '05, 20:08

wow that shit is outstanding, thank you for sharing that with all of us :worship:
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Postby niknacks » Oct 27th, '05, 20:09

wow that shit is outstanding, thank you for sharing that with all of us. keep them coming cause that was great peace :worship: :smoking: :worship:
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Postby ThomasAguanis » Oct 27th, '05, 21:02

wow.
that was amazing. i read it lisintening to the cleaning out my closet instrumental and it fit really good. you should make it an audio one day.
and like g-killa said
,your a good writer make sure you stay here k we need more people like u
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I still rap better than you.

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Postby EmFan4Life » Oct 27th, '05, 21:20

WOW!...that was really good! :thumbsup: ur a great writer! =D>
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Postby Shadyluva » Oct 27th, '05, 21:26

that was really good, if u can record it it would be really hott
keep it up
i cant rite for nothin :D
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lifee is GREAT
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Postby Inzanity » Oct 27th, '05, 22:17

oh I'm going to record it for sure
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Postby HAYZI » Oct 27th, '05, 22:23

great it shud be wicked!!
how're u gonna record it btw and where are you from may i ask?
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Postby shadys_lady28 » Oct 27th, '05, 22:24

that is sooo awesome!!!! I love it! :worship:
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