Tha Knockout Champ (Rain Matrix Diss!)

[J Roc]

Who ever said tha HOTTEST IS RAIN?. You Aint On My LEVEL, AIIGHT? You HELLA LIGHT
& I Keep tha "METAL TIGHT" Without LOCKING THA CHAINS!!!!!/
SHOTS GET @ RAIN i leave ah SHIRT PEELIN & It Aint BIRD FEELINS If Ya "COCK" IS ASHAMED!!!!/
Yup! ya girl dont LIE DAWG ya 'PIPE' SMALL You GOTTA BE "DRAINED"!!!!!!
HONEST HES GAY He Aint That Smart But He Still Tryina OFFER ME "BRAIN"!!!!!/
You SCARED BITTER Cuz i Make HAIRS "QUIVER" Like An ARCHERY GAME!!!!/
TALKING LIKE J Ain't tha HOTTEST WITH SWAG??
I SONNED RAIN MATRIX Cuz like "SUBWAY STATIONS" You OUGHT TO BE "TRAINED"!!!!!!/
OH FUCK! like when i HID CORPSES u aint IMPORTANT If His "DOUGH NUTS"? Its TIM HORTENS!!!!/
I'm SO "TIGHTER" Like FLOOR BOARDS n ya Shit's "MORE FORCED" Then ya OLD CYPHERS!!!!!/
(Rhymes lol)
So "Lets Bounce!" like LOW RIDERS When he cant "HALF AFFORD" ONE Like NO TIRES!!!!!/
(Half a Ford)
so i Easily 'Get Passed Rain'.. i Guess "MAT AH DOOR".. YUP! .. Just like BULL FIGHTERS!!!!/
Tha QUESTION SAYS.. Do You HAVE THOSE PILLS? Cuz My WEAPONS SET .. AT YOUR GRILL
s'like ah barbecue just ASK FOR MEAL'S Cause I'll LET HIM HAVE It In This LAST ORDEAL!!!/
You WACK SO CHILL!.. "Say he bell air royalty?" I'll be WRECKING M If He HAS NO SKILLS...
Shots REDDING HIM n ill rob him if he acts BASHFULL (F'REAL!)
(so i sent ah note to tha cops)
& Tha SENTANCE READ:.."FRESH PRINCE" DEAD Now Ya'll "HAVE NO WILL"!!!!!/

Lightwork/....

[MC Anonymous]

LMFAO.....

WOW!Whoever you wrote this for is R-O-A-S-T-E-D.

[J Roc]

lol thanks^

[The Toy Soldier]

Who ever said tha HOTTEST IS RAIN?. You Aint On My LEVEL, AIIGHT? You HELLA LIGHT
& I Keep tha "METAL TIGHT" Without LOCKING THA CHAINS!!!!!/
SHOTS GET @ RAIN i leave ah SHIRT PEELIN & It Aint BIRD FEELINS If Ya "COCK" IS ASHAMED!!!!/
Yup! ya girl dont LIE DAWG ya 'PIPE' SMALL You GOTTA BE "DRAINED"!!!!!!
HONEST HES GAY He Aint That Smart But He Still Tryina OFFER ME "BRAIN"!!!!!/
You SCARED BITTER Cuz i Make HAIRS "QUIVER" Like An ARCHERY GAME!!!!/
TALKING LIKE J Ain't tha HOTTEST WITH SWAG??
I SONNED RAIN MATRIX Cuz like "SUBWAY STATIONS" You OUGHT TO BE "TRAINED"!!!!!!/
OH FUCK! like when i HID CORPSES u aint IMPORTANT If His "DOUGH NUTS"? Its TIM HORTENS!!!!/
I'm SO "TIGHTER" Like FLOOR BOARDS n ya Shit's "MORE FORCED" Then ya OLD CYPHERS!!!!!/
(Rhymes lol)
So "Lets Bounce!" like LOW RIDERS When he cant "HALF AFFORD" ONE Like NO TIRES!!!!!/
(Half a Ford)
so i Easily 'Get Passed Rain'.. i Guess "MAT AH DOOR".. YUP! .. Just like BULL FIGHTERS!!!!/
Tha QUESTION SAYS.. Do You HAVE THOSE PILLS? Cuz My WEAPONS SET .. AT YOUR GRILL
s'like ah barbecue just ASK FOR MEAL'S Cause I'll LET HIM HAVE It In This LAST ORDEAL!!!/
You WACK SO CHILL!.. "Say he bell air royalty?" I'll be WRECKING M If He HAS NO SKILLS...
Shots REDDING HIM n ill rob him if he acts BASHFULL (F'REAL!)
(so i sent ah note to tha cops)
& Tha SENTANCE READ:.."FRESH PRINCE" DEAD Now Ya'll "HAVE NO WILL"!!!!!/

Lightwork/....

the point of this was what again?

[J Roc]

it isnt your busniess ... if i wanted you to know i would of said .... you arent in it so hop off his nuts n tell me what u think smh

[The Toy Soldier]

it isnt your busniess ... if i wanted you to know i would of said .... you arent in it so hop off his nuts n tell me what u think smh

u make no sense you dont want criticism yeat you post in a forum for critiquing

[J Roc]

it isnt your busniess ... if i wanted you to know i would of said .... you arent in it so hop off his nuts n tell me what u think smh

u make no sense you dont want criticism yeat you post in a forum for critiquing

i said tell me what u think ..... how did your post critisize?? .... u didn't .....

stop twisting shit around .... all u gotta do it tell me what u think ... don't be ah prick

[The Toy Soldier]

it isnt your busniess ... if i wanted you to know i would of said .... you arent in it so hop off his nuts n tell me what u think smh

u make no sense you dont want criticism yeat you post in a forum for critiquing

i said tell me what u think ..... how did your post critisize?? .... u didn't .....

stop twisting shit around .... all u gotta do it tell me what u think ... don't be ah prick

if yo uknow hwo to understand the english language it implied that it was very subpar made little sense kinda strayed off topic

[J Roc]

good u can stop talking now

[Solace]

I aint got nothing against Rain Matrix, hes a pretty cool guy, but whatever happened between you two i wont bud in. Sick piece man. Insane. Post some more shit, I dont believe ive seen you before.

[James R.]

The whole capitalization was obnoxious as hell. You wouldn't perform it with all that extra stress on the words would you?

I personally didn't think it was amazing for a diss song. If it was just any old song it woulda been hot, but this was just kinda blah. The punches were cool, the flow was off in parts, the rhyme scheme was cool but got unnecessarily complex at times with you rhyming like 18 different things in every line. It lacked the personal feeling. I mean had you not been saying his name every 3 words I wouldn't have been able to guess who you were talking about. Biggie dissed Pac without even saying his name and everyone knew who he was talking about. You want to include enough about him personally that people could at least make an educated guess and figure out who you're talking about without you telling us every few seconds.

[J Roc]

The whole capitalization was obnoxious as hell. You wouldn't perform it with all that extra stress on the words would you?

I personally didn't think it was amazing for a diss song. If it was just any old song it woulda been hot, but this was just kinda blah. The punches were cool, the flow was off in parts, the rhyme scheme was cool but got unnecessarily complex at times with you rhyming like 18 different things in every line. It lacked the personal feeling. I mean had you not been saying his name every 3 words I wouldn't have been able to guess who you were talking about. Biggie dissed Pac without even saying his name and everyone knew who he was talking about. You want to include enough about him personally that people could at least make an educated guess and figure out who you're talking about without you telling us every few seconds.

lol thanks for tha explanation ... i know i think i had ah 1 or 2 personals ... that's about it ... appreciate it though .... n thanks shady

[Solace]

James R makes a really good point there^

Also this piece, your whole way of structure and rhyming reminds me of Rain Matrix too. The whole capitalization also reminds me of him. Nothing really special, im just saying i noticed it

[neversnooze]

James R makes a really good point there^

Also this piece, your whole way of structure and rhyming reminds me of Rain Matrix too. The whole capitalization also reminds me of him. Nothing really special, im just saying i noticed it

Rain Matrix is 100x better than this guy, look at some of his posts he made on "Creative Writing".

Sorry J Roc this was just awful. With your rudimentary words, i wasnt impressed. Your examples were "eww nothing special" and "wtf?!" but you did rhyme during the whole verse.

4 out of 10

[Ka0t1c]

well i thought it was clever...8/10