Lights In My Eyes (feat. Mr. DGAF) [TRACK 3]

[Mr.DGAF]

Mr. DGAF
IDK what to say but this piece failed to impress me one bit.The flow was good but not that consistent at all.You did place One syllable words just to get the flow but that didn't do you any good.

The content was too simple and seemed unstructered and needs proper work.

Damn. Okay, I'll definitely work on it, and hopefully improve. Major thanks for the tips though. Rhyming is my biggest probelm atm, at least I think so. Struggling to pull of multi-syllable rhymes. Maybe you can check my other stuff I've done recently whenever you can, and see if maybe this was just a bad verse or if I'm not going to be successful with this writing thing.

[Sam.]

Mr. DGAF
IDK what to say but this piece failed to impress me one bit.The flow was good but not that consistent at all.You did place One syllable words just to get the flow but that didn't do you any good.

The content was too simple and seemed unstructered and needs proper work.

Damn. Okay, I'll definitely work on it, and hopefully improve. Major thanks for the tips though. Rhyming is my biggest probelm atm, at least I think so. Struggling to pull of multi-syllable rhymes. Maybe you can check my other stuff I've done recently whenever you can, and see if maybe this was just a bad verse or if I'm not going to be successful with this writing thing.

Multi-syllable rhyming is not that Important always ,look @ Slugs or Spoonfull's work not that strong on the rhyming but damn the way they say there things is simple and effective.

[Mr.DGAF]

Mr. DGAF
IDK what to say but this piece failed to impress me one bit.The flow was good but not that consistent at all.You did place One syllable words just to get the flow but that didn't do you any good.

The content was too simple and seemed unstructered and needs proper work.

Damn. Okay, I'll definitely work on it, and hopefully improve. Major thanks for the tips though. Rhyming is my biggest probelm atm, at least I think so. Struggling to pull of multi-syllable rhymes. Maybe you can check my other stuff I've done recently whenever you can, and see if maybe this was just a bad verse or if I'm not going to be successful with this writing thing.

Multi-syllable rhyming is not that Important always ,look @ Slugs or Spoonfull's work not that strong on the rhyming but damn the way they say there things is simple and effective.

Alright. I'll try and find my niche here while I'm writing. So my flow was iffy, content wasn't great. Anything else? Don't hold back at all, I'm just trying to learn.

[Sam.]

Nothing much as usual Read & Study Poetry like i do.