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Painkiller - SPR

Postby PAINKILLƎR » Aug 16th, '13, 23:48

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Inspired by some of my favourite rappers, fellow members and Scarlett, powerful.
Would appreciate some feed, first solo piece of mine that I actually like.

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[Verse 1]
No friends, this ends, your heads take 'em and mark it as targets
Explosive as supernova Scarlett that's as hot as any movie star gets
So place your bets! but don't dare to ask "who's he boy"
Try Bruce Lee Roy, with lyrics and flows that de-stroy
and punches that'll leave you with a swollen face
With words that I hold in place strong enough to rip a hole in space
Just skilled, I can bench press a plane and parallel park a train
Take your brain on a ride like a carousel, start the game
Spark a flame, y'all gonna respond? they reply "Yes we are!"
Then they don't... I guess that;s just the affect of SPR

[Hook}
In this world I'm so alone
In a category all on my own
Cause I tell the world what I want to
Yea I tell the world what I want to

Man I feel so alone
They treat me like an outcast
Cause I tell the world what I want to
But you can't tell me what you gon do

[Verse 2]
Oh boy, I saw what you did, c'mon you couldn't rap to stay alive but
Shit that's okay since every time you try to spit you choke on your own saliva
That's why you took a dive bruh, but not like my other homie
It's to bad the harmless Rolly is about as worthless as a armless goalie
So heartless, hold me, naw forget it couldn't care less if you're not feelin' it
When I voice my opinions, they're just opinions, c'mon son deal wit it
Real shit get thrown while wack shit praised, c'mon the bar should be raised
Everybody talks crazed, dudes just cock faced losers that need to be in scorched flames
Wooooah! Somebody go and get the NSA so they can capture everything that menace say
Yo, don't take my shit too literal, just say it cuz no one wants to hear rap when it's gray
But listen when I say, Ray, Silver, Rolly and everybody else writing a diss
I'm coming for blood, and based if you come at me, it'll be you resting in piss
Goddamn!!! I'm just riding with dark horse through the jaws of death
I'm just too in love with fatal attractions, I always enjoy sinking my claws in threats
Then reply faster than supersonic flying jets, This shit is just mine for the takin'
Stuff you all in a oven that I bake in, it's been known this is my awakenin'

[Hook x2]
In this world I'm so alone
In a category all on my own
Cause I tell the world what I want to
Yea I tell the world what I want to

Man I feel so alone
They treat me like an outcast
Cause I tell the world what I want to
But you can't tell me what you gon do
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Re: Painkiller - SPR

Postby Halftongue Dre » Aug 17th, '13, 00:00

Damn bro. Intresting. I like how you use some multies erratically. i like it..
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Re: Painkiller - SPR

Postby Notalius » Aug 17th, '13, 00:15

You forced the fuck outta this rhyme "de-stroy" :sweating:
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Re: Painkiller - SPR

Postby PAINKILLƎR » Aug 17th, '13, 00:24

De'anumb Halftongue wrote:Damn bro. Intresting. I like how you use some multies erratically. i like it..

thanks bruh

Rollefsen wrote:Holy fudgecake homie, that was fucking beautiful to read.. God damn.

That's why you took a dive bruh, but not like my other homie
It's to bad the harmless Rolly is about as worthless as a armless goalie

:worship: Fuck dude, I loved this shit.

Thanks bruv, tomoroow or whenever we collab though. :staticsmoking:

Notalius wrote:You forced the fuck outta this rhyme "de-stroy" :sweating:

I'm allergic to bullshit and that post just made me sneeze so now imma come at-choo and a-chieve!

But on a serious note it's not really a forced. I just put the hyphen to put emphasis on my annunciation on the first syllable of the word. For instance I hear some people pronounce it like Diss-troy, so I was just making sure it sounded like dee-stroy, you get me? A forced rhyme would be something else imo.
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Re: Painkiller - SPR

Postby Notalius » Aug 17th, '13, 01:08

PAINKILLƎR wrote:
De'anumb Halftongue wrote:Damn bro. Intresting. I like how you use some multies erratically. i like it..

thanks bruh

Rollefsen wrote:Holy fudgecake homie, that was fucking beautiful to read.. God damn.

That's why you took a dive bruh, but not like my other homie
It's to bad the harmless Rolly is about as worthless as a armless goalie

:worship: Fuck dude, I loved this shit.

Thanks bruv, tomoroow or whenever we collab though. :staticsmoking:

Notalius wrote:You forced the fuck outta this rhyme "de-stroy" :sweating:

I'm allergic to bullshit and that post just made me sneeze so now imma come at-choo and a-chieve!

But on a serious note it's not really a forced. I just put the hyphen to put emphasis on my annunciation on the first syllable of the word. For instance I hear some people pronounce it like Diss-troy, so I was just making sure it sounded like dee-stroy, you get me? A forced rhyme would be something else imo.


I know what you were aiming at .. but it still isn't a clear rhyme. But in this case you're probably right.. it's not forced
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Re: Painkiller - SPR

Postby PAINKILLƎR » Aug 17th, '13, 02:09

Notalius wrote:
PAINKILLƎR wrote:
Notalius wrote:You forced the fuck outta this rhyme "de-stroy" :sweating:

I'm allergic to bullshit and that post just made me sneeze so now imma come at-choo and a-chieve!

But on a serious note it's not really a forced. I just put the hyphen to put emphasis on my annunciation on the first syllable of the word. For instance I hear some people pronounce it like Diss-troy, so I was just making sure it sounded like dee-stroy, you get me? A forced rhyme would be something else imo.


I know what you were aiming at .. but it still isn't a clear rhyme. But in this case you're probably right.. it's not forced

Bruh, I've been listening to Hip Hop before you learned how to walk. I'm right ninja.

Basedshady wrote:Wait a second I just realized Pain done ethered me on this shit.

Man fuck this nigga he going on my track.

That was just a warning brother, but if you finna come at me I'll murk you
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Re: Painkiller - SPR

Postby Just Silver » Aug 17th, '13, 03:20

its pretty nice hooks are always tough this one was ok and used the same thing i do when i repeat the last words lol :y:

verse 2 is way better than verse one although that "just skilled train/plane" line was cool imagery

lots of memorable lines guy the armless goalie one makes me wanna write lol :obamasweat:

only thing is whats SPR Scarlett somethin?

overall youve improved alot B+

i thought it was gonna be a diss first comin into it
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Re: Painkiller - SPR

Postby CanadaPure » Aug 17th, '13, 09:29

You've improved a lot Pain, I loved this shit :D You took a major leap coming into this one imo, good stuff.
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Re: Painkiller - SPR

Postby PAINKILLƎR » Aug 18th, '13, 06:31

bigray wrote:This was great Pain, I really enjoyed it....It all flowed so well for me, you had some great lines and rhymes/multis. :y:

Thanks.

Just Silver wrote:its pretty nice hooks are always tough this one was ok and used the same thing i do when i repeat the last words lol :y:

verse 2 is way better than verse one although that "just skilled train/plane" line was cool imagery

lots of memorable lines guy the armless goalie one makes me wanna write lol :obamasweat:

only thing is whats SPR Scarlett somethin?

overall youve improved alot B+

i thought it was gonna be a diss first comin into it

SPR is super pain rap. Corn, but I lud it.
CanadaPure wrote:You've improved a lot Pain, I loved this shit :D You took a major leap coming into this one imo, good stuff.

Thanks brother,
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Re: Painkiller - SPR

Postby Eedee » Aug 18th, '13, 07:06

Damn man. That was a fun read.

This was my favorite part:

Oh boy, I saw what you did, c'mon you couldn't rap to stay alive but
Shit that's okay since every time you try to spit you choke on your own saliva


Yep yep. Good shit, bro. :y:
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