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Postby HAYZI » Sep 3rd, '05, 23:11

yeh but thats a bttle lyric so logically it would have a battle type hook

and could you vote on the battle me and dragonzedge just had it in challenging in rap battles
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Postby V-DogDaMenace » Sep 3rd, '05, 23:13

ight, post up ur verse for our track
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Postby HAYZI » Sep 3rd, '05, 23:23

...ring the bell, let off the claxon
ting-a-ling-a-ling here i come ready for action
wanna go eye to eye, toe to toe
and high for high, low for low blow for blow,
im hittin you quick like a jet of lit propane
comin... straight for your brain like its cocaine
*****s flappin their gums i attack 'em for fun
cos theyre thinkin theyre clever theyre as wack as they come
its my time to take my crown
i rock at the top and continue to break more ground
its intangible how i vandangle your brain
manhandle you simple and plain like van dam would do
we bringin the tracks to chill your spine
verbal attacks in time to heal your mind
i make mcs retract and backtrack to robbin
clear the vicinity lyrically like a carpet bombin

what you reckon?
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Postby Vettori » Sep 3rd, '05, 23:49

I like the ideas, ok i have to go out, Now that youve both posted your verse, ill make it orginized ,and post the whole thing ok ?, mind if i put intro, and make name for song ?
Give me till tommorow, cause im busy bro's peace

"Faith"
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Postby V-DogDaMenace » Sep 4th, '05, 00:41

no problem faith, & nice shit HAYZI
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Postby HAYZI » Sep 4th, '05, 00:44

thanks man sos yours

can you plz vote for the battle between me n dragonzedge theres more verses now you have to post tho not poll
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Postby V-DogDaMenace » Sep 4th, '05, 00:45

oh ight
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Postby V-DogDaMenace » Sep 4th, '05, 18:28

Artists: T12
Song Title: ???



(Verse 1 : V-Dog)
-Im DROPPIN-HITS-TO-WIN-THIS-SHIT cuz i could "Air my keys" like i "MAKE-THIS-TYPE-IN-THE-WIND", your the "OPPOSITE-OF-A-KILLER",last I heard, you "ATE-DICK"-LIKE-ITS-A-"SIN"
-Me I BREAK-YA-FUNCTION cuz u "suck the boards" when I WRECK-WIT-FULL-"BLOWZ-DROPPIN-KEYS", If RANK-IS-NUTTIN please tell me why you're only in TEKNICAL-FLOWZ-PRODIGY
-Kid your GIGS-ARE-GAY, I "drop like prison heads flowin" as I "DIVE-IN-CELL-WAVES",you betta DIG-YA-GRAVE cuz like "2pac" said, you can "live" now, but after this duel you'll "DIE-IN-L.A."
-Imma SERVE-THIS-HOT cuz like "poopin on half court" my "SHIT-KEEPS-BOARDS-IN-CENTER",Your "VERSES-DROP like virgin sex wit bent dicks", only accidental "SHIFTS-BEFORE-YOU-ENTER" /
-im "MOLDIN-THIS-SHIT with punches" like "swinging FISTS-IN-PLAYDOH", im SCOLDIN-THIS-BITCH cuz syndicat's "no pro-teen"(protein) only has "flows concealed in tabs" like "TWISTED-FAYGO"
-***** I HOIST-CREWS-I-BLAST cuz this kidz like "stupid gangstas" hes only "PROUD-TO-CRIP-WALK" my skripts knock ya "VOICE-THROUGH-YA-ASS" cuz u only know HOW-TO-"SHIT-TALK"
-my punches RIP-HOLES-THROUGH the screen with a keyboard placin a "X through ya name" and a "CROSS-IN-YA-SOUL", Im sorry sindicate but after i DISPOSE-YOU it'll be your 8th LOSS-IN-A-ROW
-Yo "mobil lips are fractured" im "MOVIN-MOUTHS-OVER" cuz this boys "weights' recycled"cuz he SPITS-"POUNDS-OF-JUNK", you winnin this is like "POOPIN-OUT-CLOVERS", ya "SHIT-OUTTA-LUCK"


(chorus)



(Verse 2 : HAYZI)
...ring the bell, let off the claxon
ting-a-ling-a-ling here i come ready for action
wanna go eye to eye, toe to toe
and high for high, low for low blow for blow,
im hittin you quick like a jet of lit propane
comin... straight for your brain like its cocaine
Nigga's flappin their gums i attack 'em for fun
cos theyre thinkin theyre clever theyre as wack as they come
its my time to take my crown
i rock at the top and continue to break more ground
its intangible how i vandangle your brain
manhandle you simple and plain like van dam would do
we bringin the tracks to chill your spine
verbal attacks in time to heal your mind
i make mcs retract and backtrack to robbin
clear the vicinity lyrically like a carpet bombin

what you reckon?


(chorus)




(Verse 3 : Faith99)



(Chorus)







FAITH C'MON MY DUDE, WRITE UR VERSE, OH AND WE NEED A CHORUS, WHAT SHOULD IT BE?
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Postby HAYZI » Sep 4th, '05, 18:38

could be sumin around
the new, the best we do confess
um... truly blessed
few can test
blew your bulletproof vest right thru your chest

obviously arranged properly and other shit 2
wot you reckon?
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Postby V-DogDaMenace » Sep 4th, '05, 18:40

the chorus is ight
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Postby HAYZI » Sep 4th, '05, 18:42

needs to be arranged and shit tho so it flows good but do you like it im jus throwin out ideas
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Postby V-DogDaMenace » Sep 4th, '05, 18:43

yea, its good, but we should edit it
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Postby HAYZI » Sep 4th, '05, 18:43

yeah blatantly any ideas?
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Postby V-DogDaMenace » Sep 4th, '05, 18:45

nah not really... anyways, what should the song be called?
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Postby HAYZI » Sep 4th, '05, 18:46

big spittaz?
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