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Re: Make It To The Top

Postby Requiem » Sep 3rd, '08, 03:02

sweet, it's looking great, but now verse 2 is like monster length. possible u could either add to verse 1, or chop 2 in half, and call it a 3 verse track.
love it tho, and definitely, when i was first reading ur freestyles like when u joined.... :whistle: .... but now, it's kinda ill. u gotta a certain flow, and it works for ur lyrics. because everyone has a distinct flow. :8)
can't wait to see the video freestyle thing, and a word of advice, like put the beat on ur ipod, and listen to it while u rap in front of the camera, so the camera doesn't pick up the sound of the beat. that way, i could mix it better.
and don't worry, i used a 4 mega pixel camera when i did the track down n dirty, before i had a mic, and the quality was pretty good :happy:
so don't sweat it, take as many takes as u need to till it flows good, sounds good, was gonna say looks good, but, it's an audio track :sweating:
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Re: Make It To The Top

Postby Solace » Sep 3rd, '08, 03:07

Wow thanks man. Yeah ill put some of the parts in verse 2, into verse 1

And thanks for callin me ill, i know what you mean by a distinct flow

Yeah this camera is 8 Megapixel (Sony Cybershot), so it should be fine. Thats a good idea about the ipod stuff thanks. and lol@ "looks good"
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Re: Make It To The Top

Postby The Toy Soldier » Sep 3rd, '08, 03:12

this is honestly good shit
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Re: Make It To The Top

Postby Requiem » Sep 3rd, '08, 03:15

shadymademe wrote:Wow thanks man. Yeah ill put some of the parts in verse 2, into verse 1

And thanks for callin me ill, i know what you mean by a distinct flow

Yeah this camera is 8 Megapixel (Sony Cybershot), so it should be fine. Thats a good idea about the ipod stuff thanks. and lol@ "looks good"


no problem :y: and when i say ill, i mean it. there aren't too many great artists on Tr, there's alot of upcoming, but not alot of great artists.
you're passing the upcoming rank by doing audio tracks, and actually writing whole songs, hook and everything.
8 megapixel :o lol, that should do just fine, just make sure there's no like background noise, like a clock chimin, or tv, or something random. cuz when i was doing down n dirty, i was listening to it, and i was like "are those birds?" :confusion:
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Re: Make It To The Top

Postby Solace » Sep 3rd, '08, 03:15

:o Thanks

oh yeah actually instead of putting some verse 2 lines in verse 1 i just made 3 verses like ice killa suggested.

edit: LOL "are those birds"

yeah dont worry when i record it ill be home alone in a quiet space. thanks for all the support Ice. :happy:
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Re: Make It To The Top

Postby Requiem » Sep 3rd, '08, 03:29

no problem, it's what i do :8) just record it when u can, save it to ur computer, and pm me the raw video via rapidshare, megaupload. :y: i don't like zshare too much, but take ur time. it's taking me forever to get my next track finished, just because there's always like one line that i stutter on, or i fall off flow, or i don't have enough emotion. so i record it until it's the way i like it, u kno? :happy:
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Re: Make It To The Top

Postby Solace » Sep 3rd, '08, 03:31

IceKilla wrote:no problem, it's what i do :8) just record it when u can, save it to ur computer, and pm me the raw video via rapidshare, megaupload. :y: i don't like zshare too much, but take ur time. it's taking me forever to get my next track finished, just because there's always like one line that i stutter on, or i fall off flow, or i don't have enough emotion. so i record it until it's the way i like it, u kno? :happy:

Ahk will do will do. So your perfecting your track then :) Cool, cant wait to hear it when its out then
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Re: Make It To The Top

Postby Solace » Sep 4th, '08, 22:59

shadymademe wrote:
IceKilla wrote:no problem, it's what i do :8) just record it when u can, save it to ur computer, and pm me the raw video via rapidshare, megaupload. :y: i don't like zshare too much, but take ur time. it's taking me forever to get my next track finished, just because there's always like one line that i stutter on, or i fall off flow, or i don't have enough emotion. so i record it until it's the way i like it, u kno? :happy:

Ahk will do will do. So your perfecting your track then :) Cool, cant wait to hear it when its out then


PS. Edited the chorus and verse 2

think its much better
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Re: Make It To The Top

Postby Requiem » Sep 5th, '08, 01:35

hmm, perhaps the line in verse 1 "i'll never meet the day in which i meet success,"
it might sound better as "i guess i'll never reach the day in which i meet success," just for flow reasons, and a little wordplay.

also it sounds better if u delete "nah man" from the middle of verse 2. other than that, there's nothing i can really point out where the flow falls off.

also, absolutely love the line where ur like "take critic's tongue, and make em swallow it," i was like o sh*t :o
it's really good, i know i've said it before, but it is. those were the only flow things i could find, for recording reasons, extra words can sometimes trip u up when rapping.
pretty ill tho, and can't wait for the freestyle thing. :8)
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Re: Make It To The Top

Postby Solace » Sep 5th, '08, 01:41

IceKilla wrote:hmm, perhaps the line in verse 1 "i'll never meet the day in which i meet success,"
it might sound better as "i guess i'll never reach the day in which i meet success," just for flow reasons, and a little wordplay.

also it sounds better if u delete "nah man" from the middle of verse 2. other than that, there's nothing i can really point out where the flow falls off.

also, absolutely love the line where ur like "take critic's tongue, and make em swallow it," i was like o sh*t :o
it's really good, i know i've said it before, but it is. those were the only flow things i could find, for recording reasons, extra words can sometimes trip u up when rapping.
pretty ill tho, and can't wait for the freestyle thing. :8)

Your like the only person keeping this topic alive lmao

anyways thanks for hte advice, ill use that line and take away nah man. Im gunna try to extend the thing that im gunna record for you. I want it to be very ill, as its my first recording.
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Re: Make It To The Top

Postby Requiem » Sep 5th, '08, 02:02

shadymademe wrote:
IceKilla wrote:hmm, perhaps the line in verse 1 "i'll never meet the day in which i meet success,"
it might sound better as "i guess i'll never reach the day in which i meet success," just for flow reasons, and a little wordplay.

also it sounds better if u delete "nah man" from the middle of verse 2. other than that, there's nothing i can really point out where the flow falls off.

also, absolutely love the line where ur like "take critic's tongue, and make em swallow it," i was like o sh*t :o
it's really good, i know i've said it before, but it is. those were the only flow things i could find, for recording reasons, extra words can sometimes trip u up when rapping.
pretty ill tho, and can't wait for the freestyle thing. :8)

Your like the only person keeping this topic alive lmao

anyways thanks for hte advice, ill use that line and take away nah man. Im gunna try to extend the thing that im gunna record for you. I want it to be very ill, as its my first recording.


lmao, i know that feeling. u wanna come out swinging. u want ur first audio track to make people say "why couldn't my first attempt be that good, or that ill?"

:happy:
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Re: Make It To The Top

Postby Solace » Sep 5th, '08, 02:05

IceKilla wrote:
shadymademe wrote:
IceKilla wrote:hmm, perhaps the line in verse 1 "i'll never meet the day in which i meet success,"
it might sound better as "i guess i'll never reach the day in which i meet success," just for flow reasons, and a little wordplay.

also it sounds better if u delete "nah man" from the middle of verse 2. other than that, there's nothing i can really point out where the flow falls off.

also, absolutely love the line where ur like "take critic's tongue, and make em swallow it," i was like o sh*t :o
it's really good, i know i've said it before, but it is. those were the only flow things i could find, for recording reasons, extra words can sometimes trip u up when rapping.
pretty ill tho, and can't wait for the freestyle thing. :8)

Your like the only person keeping this topic alive lmao

anyways thanks for hte advice, ill use that line and take away nah man. Im gunna try to extend the thing that im gunna record for you. I want it to be very ill, as its my first recording.


lmao, i know that feeling. u wanna come out swinging. u want ur first audio track to make people say "why couldn't my first attempt be that good, or that ill?"


:happy:



hehe yeah pretty much so im trying to figure out some nice lines. Do you think i should do any more for "Make It To The Top"?
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Re: Make It To The Top

Postby Requiem » Sep 5th, '08, 02:10

^try and fix ur response thing, cuz it's all in quotes.

also, the first verse could use maybe 1 or 2 extra lines, it's kinda short. other than that, it's perfect the way it is. :y:
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Re: Make It To The Top

Postby Solace » Sep 5th, '08, 02:14

IceKilla wrote:^try and fix ur response thing, cuz it's all in quotes.

also, the first verse could use maybe 1 or 2 extra lines, it's kinda short. other than that, it's perfect the way it is. :y:


Alright ill think of 2 lines, add em and im officially done writing this.
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Re: Make It To The Top [Final]

Postby Solace » Sep 7th, '08, 22:56

okay i know im done but that doesnt mean people gotta stop commenting


bump. Anyone else that hasnt checked this out. Please :unsure:
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