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Re: NEW - Run My Mouth (UNDONE)

Postby Solace » Nov 17th, '08, 22:25

z_em wrote:
shadymademe wrote:
You judging like you know me, but you dont know shit,
The only time you come close to me is when your blowing, bitch


i liked this line , cuz i feel like there's a lot of emotions going on , so talking about the first verse it's sick man in terms of rhymes metaphors 2 flow was good but what's hold my attention is how u expressed what are u feeling on that verse it's amazing .. Second verse is the one that i liked it more.. i don’t know i always prefer your 2nd verses i found them more creative :p. so it was dope man keep writing .. nd nice ( run my mouth ) from ya :happy: ..

Thanks a lot man! Im glad you liked it, and im glad you say the emotions are very strong. I hope the third verse will be as good (if not better) than the second ;)
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Re: NEW - Run My Mouth

Postby MC Anonymous » Nov 17th, '08, 22:36

shadymademe wrote:Rawrbleh


Hopefully saying them wont give 'em any fame,
Benzino, Soulja Boy and Lil Wayne,
a quick list of shitty rappers that rack my brain,
how the fuck could Crank Dat and Lolipop become hits?
Obviously a mass proportion of Earth enjoys shit!

[Chorus x2]


Note: Verse 3 uses some lines from another piece 'It's Just Epiphany' which isnt gunna be recorded, and it was pretty bad, but this is going to be recorded (eventually...) and i took the best lines.


WOO!!!! You were speaking truth there bro!
Excellent 3rd verse.
LMFAO@ Brittney, bitch looking worse than a chupacabra mixed with a broken down coyote. You're disgusting ugly, so ugly in fact, my brain simultaneously exploded while processing how bitterly grotesque you look. I would much rather stick ice picks into the walls of my cranium, then stick my dick into your quagmire of a clitoris. You're what would happen if a sperm whale mated with a Godzilla fish..


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Re: NEW - Run My Mouth

Postby Solace » Nov 17th, '08, 22:37

MC Anonymous wrote:
shadymademe wrote:Rawrbleh


Hopefully saying them wont give 'em any fame,
Benzino, Soulja Boy and Lil Wayne,
a quick list of shitty rappers that rack my brain,
how the fuck could Crank Dat and Lolipop become hits?
Obviously a mass proportion of Earth enjoys shit!

[Chorus x2]


Note: Verse 3 uses some lines from another piece 'It's Just Epiphany' which isnt gunna be recorded, and it was pretty bad, but this is going to be recorded (eventually...) and i took the best lines.


WOO!!!! You were speaking truth there bro!
Excellent 3rd verse.


Woo :) Thanks, glad you liked it! That was a part from my old piece, its just epiphany. i knew it was good to put it in!
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Re: NEW - Run My Mouth

Postby Requiem » Nov 17th, '08, 22:53

^sweet verse 3. glad u resurrected some incredible lines from an old work. fit great in this song. now all u need to do is record it :happy:
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Re: NEW - Run My Mouth

Postby Solace » Nov 17th, '08, 22:54

IceKilla wrote:^sweet verse 3. glad u resurrected some incredible lines from an old work. fit great in this song. now all u need to do is record it :happy:

get yo bitch ass on msn :angry:

and thanks :sweating:
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Re: NEW - Run My Mouth

Postby Requiem » Nov 18th, '08, 00:25

wash yo mouth out with soap home dawg, i am on :8)
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Re: NEW - Run My Mouth

Postby Solace » Nov 18th, '08, 03:40

IceKilla wrote:wash yo mouth out with soap home dawg, i am on :8)

Well i aint :) Got some important work to do. Enough procrastination.
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Re: NEW - Run My Mouth

Postby Slim Zaddy » Nov 18th, '08, 15:51

I'm a perfect role model for little children in grade 2,
I make them smoke weed at 9, and make them hate school,


i love this one , this also was a good verse .. but i still liked the 2nd more .. :y:
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Re: NEW - Run My Mouth

Postby shift » Nov 18th, '08, 15:58

shadymademe wrote:Rawrbleh

[Verse 1]
People dont like me but i dont even blame em,
In fact I go right to them and tell them to keep hating,
People dont understand me, people cant apprehend me,
But I take it like a joke as if they were my family,
Tick tock the clock keeps ticking,
Hoes is just fucking and moms is just bitching,
Why did I choose to go down this path,
Waving my middle finger screaming "KISS MY ASS",
Well I guess its music thats influenced me,
To not smoke marijuana, instead just chew the weed,
Its amazing, how much Ive been talking,
Talking shit, gibberish, and then i keep walking,
Laughing it up, cause to me life is a joke,
So i tell as many as I can but with multies, similes & metaphors.

[Chorus x2]
Some people cant take it, its too big of a dose,
Getting chills down their spines like my lines were ghosts,
But it dont matter, I like when people hate me,
It just motivates me to take pleasure and start embracing.

[Verse 2]
The good die young, guess ima die an old man,
Rap is like poker, everyone except me is folding',
Im still a kid but my mind has matured,
Thinking like a 20 year old lunatic, saneness is cured,
People acting hard as if they were some serial killer,
Probably couldnt kill a beat with my material gone iller,
This part of the song is for my rant, so get ready,
Side effects: Ears might blow like confetti,
So fuck you, fuck your school, fuck your parents,
Self centered in the center of rap, I aint tryin to hear it,
Dont like me? Then just dont pretend respectin',
Rather you admit it than hiding it like a kid in my basement,
You judging like you know me, but you dont know shit,
The only time you come close to me is when your blowing, bitch.

[Chorus x2]

[Verse 3]
I aint good for children, they shouldnt ever hear me,
And if they dont like me id rather they fear me,
I'm a perfect role model for little children in grade 2,
I make them smoke weed at 9, and make them hate school,
Yeah 'It's Just Epiphany', dont like it, dont listen to me,
Id rather you ignore than have some bitching beef,
So now im gunna have to call out some names,
Hopefully saying them wont give 'em any fame,
Benzino, Soulja Boy and Lil Wayne,
a quick list of shitty rappers that rack my brain,
how the fuck could Crank Dat and Lolipop become hits?
Obviously a mass proportion of Earth enjoys shit!

[Chorus x2]


Note: Verse 3 uses some lines from another piece 'It's Just Epiphany' which isnt gunna be recorded, and it was pretty bad, but this is going to be recorded (eventually...) and i took the best lines.



i like it , peaceeeee
i don't speak english >_>
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Re: NEW - Run My Mouth

Postby Solace » Nov 18th, '08, 21:56

z_em wrote:I'm a perfect role model for little children in grade 2,
I make them smoke weed at 9, and make them hate school,


i love this one , this also was a good verse .. but i still liked the 2nd more .. :y:

thanks, that was one old line but i loved it and had to re-use it. Glad it was good :y:

@Shift, thanks :)
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