inside of my head

[Ka0t1c]

Inside of my head it's like a spider's cobweb
but my mind is not dead, instead
i desire to set a fire to spread
cuz i'm dyin, tired and mad
just by tryin to stand, yet
how can i find me a hand
when i am the man high in command
i deny to understand that
why my time could come to an end
so to all my friends and my fans
this is how i begin my plans to
defend my land until i'm dead
even if spillin blood, i really have to...

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http://forum.trshady.com/viewtopic.php?f=24&t=23551&p=1434914#p1434914

[Solace]

I think the structure sort of fucked me over flowing it but it was okay. It definitely got more clear (the flow) throughout the middle, and worked better. It was a little vague, but okay. Definitely not your best work, I couldn't really pick out any lines that stood out, you know? Stay writing man,

[Ka0t1c]

alright man, thanx checking this piece out and for your input on it!