First Rap Tune To Be Recorded

[Tash8]

ok well i like this, i have trouble rhyming some of the stuff, but we could have two different accents and that's why... I'll show u what i mean:
tyranny, virginity
caravan, ramadan
but if you can make those rhyme, then more power to ya...

I like these lines:
Or I'll stab you and give you a get well soon card,

circumstances, certain chances--->great rhyme choice, flows perfect

but the line right after it, just doesn't seem that good and feels like a filler "waiting around untill a person dances" and feels forced
Brighten her day when I make her hole weak--GREAT fucking line
I go nuts, on pro plus,
Snorting saw dust I'm not catchin no bus,<--i'm loving the rhymes on this

"Ask me "why're my eyes massive?"
And the answer's simple - I like acid,"

great line, just one suggestion

"ask me "why're my eyes massive?"
It'ssimple, my answer - I like acid."

I say this because Mass and Ans have very similar sounds and this makes it flow and very slightly rhyme. Eyes/My rhyme so it even works better

I completely wrecked their plans for me,
Coz I rolled and smoked my family tree!--great ending to a great verse, as corny as that line was, it was dope


would love if u hit me back when i drop my new piece, smoke n ride

[Mr. Chambers]

link of feedback?

[Poison Ivy]

Great flow to this but in some parts I also had trouble reading it but other then that this was great, love the ending part too it

[Tash8]

it's already dropped, but instead of that could u feed Let Go in the Audio stage for me? thx