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SaJJad/McZu/MikeNUFC - Terrorist Remix

Postby Xray » Feb 23rd, '11, 23:37

Beat: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=oQHqBTwGTFc

    SaJJad
    I live off the moments, live life disguised
    Open your shoulders, and lift up your eyes
    Ocean just soakens, you drift up and die
    These soldiers have omens living in their mind
    A token, a bonus, but you're their sacrifice
    They take you for notice and leave you surprised
    Break you and focus on killing your rights
    Tape you then duck you the rest of their lives
    Fuck you then leave you to dress up with knives
    Bust you if they want to and press on with fines
    Charges from both ways comin' like an alkaline
    Mothers and fathers forced to face these crimes
    They don't care about you, the world is their victim
    The system will tear you, until you stop listenin'
    You might make us deaf with your nuclear bombs
    But we will fight to the death with the spear of gods

    McZu
    The improper agenda of propaganda
    Placing poisoned products of Procter & Gamble
    Through marketing the market in
    This age we’re embarking in
    Is one of targeting the ethnic minorities; the saga begins
    Of selling the fear they harbor within
    Calling us martyrs that sin
    While a pop artist offers to sing
    In Israel, where Arabs can’t even harvest a thing
    I pray every single night for a utopia
    But reality is engulfed in xenophobia
    From Sofia to Ethiopia to Austria
    I ask if ya could open your mind till we’re all free
    ‘cause we equal in not having equality
    They want to ban my genetics
    And they’re quick to call us anti-Semitic
    Ironically Arabs belong to the Semitic people, too
    I guess certain semantics can be evil, too
    ‘cause I can’t be anti my own people, fools
    I’m a strong believer in telling people they’re beautiful
    Even if the feeling isn’t mutual...

    MikeNUFC
    We only care about shit within our own community
    Bombs overseas? Who cares, there’s a fuel increase
    And student fees, I moan but does it really ruin me?
    Of course not, its truth indeed, I have hot food to eat
    I ain’t getting bombed like Iraqi youth who weep
    “But I gotta pay an increase on my roof that leaked!”
    As guilty as you for being trivial... stop and see
    You’ll see that lives are always lost… just for democracy
    But then we seem to turn a blind eye… so as not to see
    Yet our eyes are focused as students yell “Stop the fees!”
    And we don’t condemn America for constant robbery
    But someone robs your fam you shout - it's nonsense, honestly
    No-one gives a damn… when it’s Middle Eastern property
    Stuck in your own world, start to think and you will agree
    When it comes to it we do fuck all to stop the beef
    Answers can be freed but we choose the lock and not the key

My verse starts when the drums come in.

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Re: SaJJad/McZu/MikeNUFC - Terrorist Remix

Postby MikeNUFC » Feb 24th, '11, 00:29

Good work guys.

I love how pretentious my verse is lol and I kinda fucked up my flow about half way through. That third to last line kinda annoys me as well. Ah well.
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Re: SaJJad/McZu/MikeNUFC - Terrorist Remix

Postby Block » Feb 24th, '11, 01:42

This was pretty dope. I can't listen to the beat and lyrics at the same time on my phone, but from reading them it seems nice. From just reading, it seems zu's flows together the smoothest. xray, it kinda seems like you're missing some syllables in your lines. It could just be me, but it seems kind choppy on proper.

The overall "revolutionary" feel has been done alot, obviously. You guys didn't bring anything "new" so to say, but efron had dope verses, none the less.

Good job, guys.



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Re: SaJJad/McZu/MikeNUFC - Terrorist Remix

Postby SajN » Feb 24th, '11, 12:07

Amadeo wrote:Mike killed his verse. My favorite verse from him yet. I like how he is himself (talks about stuff that's going on in his country like students protesting fees).

But then we seem to turn a blind eye… so as not to see
Yet our eyes are focused as students yell “Stop the fees!”

Cool line.

Zu and Sajn were good too.

Oh why thank you, lol.



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Re: SaJJad/McZu/MikeNUFC - Terrorist Remix

Postby Xray » Feb 24th, '11, 14:21

Lmao. Thanks I guess. :shakehead:
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Re: SaJJad/McZu/MikeNUFC - Terrorist Remix

Postby MikeNUFC » Feb 24th, '11, 15:14

Cheers Amadeo :y:

The beat is actaully harder to write to than I'd imagined. Makes me appreciate the song even more.
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Re: SaJJad/McZu/MikeNUFC - Terrorist Remix

Postby mcZu » Feb 24th, '11, 22:29

Thanks for the feed y'all.
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Re: SaJJad/McZu/MikeNUFC - Terrorist Remix

Postby MikeNUFC » Feb 28th, '11, 18:02

This is getting slept on.

zu's verse >>>. Perfect flow, amazing word choice/vocab, great rhyming and assonance and cool referencing of current stories (Macy Gray for eg). Definitely Lowkey influenced.
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