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Ross, Wayne, Soulja and Drake!

Postby Static » Feb 24th, '11, 11:22

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The two last verses are better than the first, so please read through it all. And also, this is a "love" song to Lil Wayne, Soulja Boy, Rick Ross and Drake (cause I love them so damn much)!

(Verse 1)
Fuck you four, you're like quadruplets
A quad of useless, clueless judases
I'ma be ruthless and leave ya'll toothless
Unless ya'll piss off and leave the booths
You decieved the roots, hip hop's now trash
You just show'd up, 'n flop'd it for the cash
So let me wipe your ass, with a sniper that's
Giving a new defintion to snipe your ass
And Drake and Soulja, Wayne's playin' Joseph Fritzel
Better hope your bitches, know when to sit still
And love the duck tape when it's time fo some slut rape
But don't worry, Wayne'll only loosen up the butt gape
Now if you didn't know, my chores to destroy
Yeah, Ima force way worse than Little Boy
What'ya talkin' 'bout? Yeah, 'course this kid'll blow
Bitch, welcome to my world! And welcome to my show!

(Verse 2)
Fuck you, you make the cons-list endless
Time fo' consequenses, this monster's fenceless
Nobody in their right mind wants to face this
I'ma fuckin' tickin' time bomb that is chasin'
You, so get ready to face some abomination
Don't ya dare fuckin' up my harmonic wasteland
Spit ya last line, admit ya shoved rap past prime
And if Tupac was alive you wouldn't even last a line
To all you disgraces, I'ma fight 'till you drool
For instance, I'm bring a fuckin' rifle to school
Or maybe I'll be raw and use a knife as my tool
To slice up some fool cause he says Soulja's cool
And a mainiac, denies that Wayne's whack
Wayne's a pain in the anus, we should demonstrate
His Lolipop fuck'd rap into a techno state
But even tho I'm late, it's over, fuckin check mate

(Verse 3)
I'm fuckin killin you off, I'm not sticking to faith
We can do it right away, or you can pick a fuckin date
Yeah Rick, you didn't get thick from what you ate
You're fill'd up with shit, that's what's on your plate
You're a bitch that pretends to be cussin 'n hustelin
But I'm bustin your thin - cover up, you're a cop
You obey the law, you can't betray it at all
The reason why your famous? Your weight is balls!
(beat drops) o'wait, shit, bring the beat back
Man I still have Drake, that' twat's fake
Yeah he's whack mate, and he's not even a rapper
So why didn't media leave him as an actor
He's rapin the field we believe in with a tractor
That cock should've stayed at Degrassi High
Now he's runnin around makin it messy, why!?
Shot should've been real, he should be rollin on wheels
So kick him my way, if you see Rick Murray!
...and god damnit, give him a fuckin hip hooray!

I'm currently finishing up the beat to this, and I'll have it recorded in a coupple of weeks probably. Anyways, I just wanted to see what you guys thought about the lyrics, and I would love any kind of feedback! So please leave a little reply if you took the time to read through it all! :flutter:
They say the good die young,
That's why I think that you should have fun
Cos time won't wait for no one
When god calls, you gotta go home
They say the good die young
That's why I know that we go' have fun,
In this life cos you only get one
When God calls for me, don't cry I just went home ♪
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Re: Ross, Wayne, Soulja and Drake!

Postby Sam. » Feb 24th, '11, 11:29

Super dope multis hats of to that ,nice verse's there i liked it ,small bars but good for the flow.
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Re: Ross, Wayne, Soulja and Drake!

Postby Static » Feb 24th, '11, 12:21

MCSam wrote:Super dope multis hats of to that ,nice verse's there i liked it ,small bars but good for the flow.


Thanks alot! Yeah, multis is something I've been working alot on lately. I'm going to try to focus on the flow now, since I'll be recording! I know the flow is pretty good if I can just get it 100% right. I always say one or two words a little too fast or too late. And I'm a perfectionist, so I always start over again if that happens xD

Anyways, is there anything you think I should try to work on to improve my lyrics? I'll ofcourse always try to improve at all aspects, but if there's anything sepsific, I would love to know! :happy:
They say the good die young,
That's why I think that you should have fun
Cos time won't wait for no one
When god calls, you gotta go home
They say the good die young
That's why I know that we go' have fun,
In this life cos you only get one
When God calls for me, don't cry I just went home ♪
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Re: Ross, Wayne, Soulja and Drake!

Postby RainMan44 » Feb 25th, '11, 04:30

I liked it, especially the meaning behind it :y:


My favorite part was
"I'ma fight 'till you drool
For instance, I'm bring a fuckin' rifle to school
Or maybe I'll be raw and use a knife as my tool
To slice up some fool."

The rhyming on that was insane. Good job!


Think you can leave feedback on my verse dude? I'd appreciate it :D
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In an inner tube with a dude with a bit of lube
Fuck that I’m sniffin’ glue, sippin' gin & juice,
And a little bit of paint thinner with my dinner too,
You better pay me for my bars like your rent is due,
Now hurry up and finish dude before I finish you."




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Re: Ross, Wayne, Soulja and Drake!

Postby ArsheyHaq » Feb 25th, '11, 07:44

LOL I enjoyed reading this cuz I'm no fan of Ross or Soulja, so the dissing and killing them was really a treat haha I actually like Wayne and Drake, though, but to each his own :)

Anyway, I agree with everyone else that you have some nice multis, but keep working on 'em... Some of them seemed forced, but nice flow and good concept! I'm looking forward to reading more of your stuff, man.
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